bitte um korrektur theme: health

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Rose55
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bitte um korrektur theme: health

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hallo. ich würde mich freuen, wenn jemand das korrigieren könnte.7

Whose responsibility is to make sure that people are healthy? In your opinion, what influence could or should governments have?
In our opinion the responsibility is by the doctors, the state or the government and at least by all people who live and want to be alive. These people have to go to the doctor say what kind of problems he or she has and he has to go as many as one times in a year. The state and the government have to take care that all people could go to a doctor. It should not be too expensive and it should give all kind of doctors in a country. This is the responsibility of the state and the government because they decide the laws for health and they make the health care reforms. One the one hand this is good, that the governments have a big influence. But on the other hand it is not so good because not every government interests in these things and so this is not sure whether everyone could be health. In our opinion it would be better, when the governments have not this influence anymore. Doctor has the most responsibility to make sure that people are healthy. This is their job. They could not say that anyone is health when he is not. They have to look at the people and make a diagnosis or send them to another doctor who could help them maybe better. And at least the responsibility to make sure that they are health is by the people, because they have to go to the doctor, tell him the problem and then the doctor could say something. It says that patients who go to a doctor and would not say what problems they have could not will be healthy. In our opinion the responsibility is by these three groups.


dankeschön im vorraus :D




joy
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Re: bitte um korrektur theme: health

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Hi Rose
Hier ist ein Korrekturvorschlag von mir.
Ich habe die Aenderungen gross geschrieben

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Whose responsibility is IT to make sure that people are healthy? In your opinion, what influence could or should governments have?
In our opinion the doctors, the state or the government and at LAST all people who live and want to be alive, ARE RESPONSIBLE FOR PEOPLE’S HEALTH. These people have to go to the doctor say what kind of problems THEY HAVE, and THEY HAVE to go as many as ONCE a year. The state and the government have to take care that all people could go to a doctor. It should not be too expensive and it should give all kind of doctors in a country. This is the responsibility of the state and the government because they decide the laws for health and they make the HEALTH REFORMS. ON the one hand IT is good, that the governments have a big influence. But on the other hand it is not so good because not every government IS INTERESTED in these things and so IT is not sure whether everyone could be IN health. In our opinion it would be better, IF the governments have not this influence anymore. A DOCTOR has the most responsibility to make sure that people are healthy. This is their job. They could not say that anyone is IN health when he is not. They have to look at the people and make a diagnosis or send them to another doctor who could help them maybe better. And at LAST PEOPLE ARE RESPONSIBLE to make sure that they are HEALTHY, because they ARE THE ONES WHO have to go to the doctor, tell him the problem and then the doctor could say something. It says that patients who go to a doctor and would not say what problems they have could not BECOME healthy. In our opinion, ALL THREE GROUPS ARE RESPONIBLE FOR PEOPLE’S HEALTH.

Liebe Grüsse joy


Duckduck
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Re: bitte um korrektur theme: health

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Rose55 hat geschrieben:Hallo. ich würde mich freuen, wenn jemand das korrigieren könnte.7

Ich beziehe joy's Korrektur mit ein, aber vielleicht finde ich ja noch was... :freak2:

Whose responsibility is it to make sure that people are healthy? In your opinion, what influence could or should governments have?

In our opinion, the responsibility lies with the doctors, the state or the government and finally with all people who live and want to be alive. These people have to go to the doctors, tell them what kind of problems they have and that at least once a year. The state and the government have to make sure that all people get the chance to go and see a doctor. So it should not be too expensive and there should be all kinds of doctors ( = medical specialists) available in a country. This lies in the responsibility of the state and the government because they establish the laws for health and they are responsible for any health reforms. One the one hand it is positive that the governments have a big say in these matters. But on the other hand it might be problematic, because not every government is sure to show enough interest in the question whether every citizen is amply provided for. In our opinion it would be better if the governments didn't have this influence anymore. Most of the responsibility to make sure that people are healthy rests with the doctors. This is their job. They can't say that anyone is healthy when they are not. They have to look at the people and make a diagnosis or send them to another doctor who might be better equipped to help them. And finally people themselves are responsible for looking after their health, by keeping well and fit and consulting a doctor if necessary. Only people who don't want to stay healthy wouldn't tell their doctors the truth about their physical condition. In our opinion the responsibility lies with these three groups.


Dankeschön im vorraus :D
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