"Apology to the Stolen Generation" - bitte korrigieren :)

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Heunie
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"Apology to the Stolen Generation" - bitte korrigieren :)

Beitrag von Heunie »

Hallo ihr,
es wäre wirklich sehr lieb von euch, wenn ihr einen kurzen Blick über meine Zusammenfassung der Rede von Kevin Rudd werfen könntet!
Verbesserungsvorschläge und Hinweise nehme ich gerne an :)

The speech "Apology to the Stolen Generations", declaimed on 13th of February 2008 by Kevin Rudd, deals with an excuse for committing an injustice to the Aborigines.
Kevin Rudd, the Prime Minister of Australia, held the speech in front of the federal parliament and the Australian nation.
In the years 1910 to 1979, government took so called "half-castes" from their homes and families and placed them in white homes or boarding schools, to get prepared for working as domestics.

The type of the speech is an apology speech.
The speech is divided in three sections.
Line 3 to 13 deals about the past and the unfairness of the government towards the Aborigines.
Line 14 to 23 tells about the present and from line 24 to 36 Kevin Rudd mentions the future of Australia and the in time to come shared identity.

The speech “Apology to the Stolen Generations” exhibits a lot of rhetorical devices.
In the first section about the past, Kevin Rudd uses frequently the word “we”, which is an anaphora.
It demonstrates the mutual belief of the Australian nation.
“A new page in Australia’s history” in line 6 to 7 is a metaphor.
Furthermore, in line 29 the metaphor “to close the gap that lies between us” shows the past segregation of the whites and the Aborigines.
In line 27, Kevin Rudd repeats the word “never”, which is a strengthening of his statement that the injustice will not happen again.

The speech exhibits a lot of emotional words like mutual, equal and the future.
Those words have an influence on the mood of the audience.

The aspiration of the speech is to create an equal feeling of all Australian citizens.
I think “Apology to the Stolen Generation” is a formal and unreserved apology to the Aborigines.




Keswick
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Re: "Apology to the Stolen Generation" - bitte korrigieren :)

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Heunie hat geschrieben:Hallo ihr,
es wäre wirklich sehr lieb von euch, wenn ihr einen kurzen Blick über meine Zusammenfassung der Rede von Kevin Rudd werfen könntet!
Verbesserungsvorschläge und Hinweise nehme ich gerne an :)

The speech "Apology to the Stolen Generations", declaimed on 13th of February 2008 by Kevin Rudd, deals with an excuse for committing an injustice to the Aborigines.
Kevin Rudd, the Prime Minister of Australia, held the speech in front of the federal parliament and the Australian nation.
In the years 1910 to 1979, government took so called "half-castes" from their homes and families and placed them in white homes or boarding schools, to get them prepared for working as domestics.

The type of the speech is an apology speech.
The speech is divided into three sections.
Line 3 to 13 deals with the past and the unfairness of the government towards the Aborigines.
Line 14 to 23 tells about the present and from line 24 to 36 Kevin Rudd mentions the future of Australia and the shared identity in times to come.

The speech “Apology to the Stolen Generations” exhibits a lot of rhetorical devices.
In the first section about the past, Kevin Rudd frequently uses the word “we”, which is an anaphora.
It demonstrates the mutual belief of the Australian nation.
“A new page in Australia’s history” in line 6 to 7 is a metaphor.
Furthermore, in line 29 the metaphor “to close the gap that lies between us” shows the past segregation of the whites and the Aborigines.
In line 27, Kevin Rudd repeats the word “never”, which is a strengthening of his statement that the injustice will not happen again.

The speech exhibits a lot of emotional words like mutual, equal and the future.
Those words have an influence on the mood of the audience.

The aspiration of the speech is to create an equal feeling of all Australian citizens.
I think “Apology to the Stolen Generation” is a formal and unreserved apology to the Aborigines.
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