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[Klaudi]

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Dear family,

It has been a long time since we wrote. We are curious to know what's new.
I am Magda, the daughter of Eva. My parents are still in Germany, because my brother has health problems. I have been studying in Poland for a year, but I spend my holidays in Germany.
I would be happy to hear from you, if it is possible.

Best Wishes

Anna, the daughter of Eva (=the daughter of Max Maier, who was aunt Ursula's brother)

Danke schon im Vorraus!

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Dear family,

It has been a long time since we last wrote. We are curious to know what's new.
I am Magda, the daughter of Eva. My parents are still in Germany, because my brother has health problems. I have been studying in Poland for a year, but I spend my holidays in Germany.
I would be happy to hear from you, if it is possible.

Best Wishes

Anna, the daughter of Eva (=the daughter of Max Maier, who was aunt Ursula's brother)

Danke schon im Vorraus!