Charakterisierung

[marvin92]

Habe das noch mal ein wenig überarbeitet:

Mrs. Mary Maloney is a married wife without kids, but nevertheless she is pregnant. Her mouth is soft and the eyes seemed larger dacker than before (p. l.). She still loves her husband, who is a detective (p. l.) and she is always helpful (p. l.). Besides she doesn't have any kind of job or hobbies, because Mary does nothing till Patrick comes home (p.l.), she is just sitting in a chair and sews (p.l.). After she heard something bad about her relationship from her husband, she reacts, how everyone would react, because Mrs. Maloney is shocked and doesn't want to get it, what happened. In spite of that bad news she cooks for her husband (p.l.), which is a litte bit weird. Mary is also cold, because she kills Patrick Maloney without any good reason (p.l.). After the murder Mary acts almost everything, except her feelings to her husband. At the end of the text Mrs. Maloney giggles, that shows possibly that she is happy that she can't be suspected because of the eatened(gegessen) lamb, which wasthe weapon, too.

-Die fettgedruckten Wörter habe ich entweder verbessert oder neu hinzugefügt.

Könnte mir jemand einen Tipp geben, wie ich das Wort "because" nicht sooft benutze?
Habe es hier schon relativ oft benutzt und ein Synonym für "because" ist mir auch nicht eingefallen.

[Delfino]

(p.l.) ???

Habe den Text noch einmal ein wenig überarbeitet:

Mrs. Mary Maloney is a married wife without kids, but nevertheless she is pregnant.
Her lips are soft and the eyes seem to be larger and darker than before.
She still loves her husband, who is a detective.
Mary doesn't have any kind of job or hobbies.
She is just sitting in a chair and sews.
So she does nothing till Patrick comes home, but she is always helpful.
After her husband told her about their bad relationship Mrs. Maloney reacts like most people would.
Given these circumstances she is shocked and doesn't want to realise what just happened.
In spite of these bad news she cooks for her husband, which is a little bit weird.
Mary seems cold blooded, because she kills Patrick Maloney without a proper reason.
After the murder Mary acts almost indifferent, except for her feelings towards her husband.
At the end of the text Mrs. Maloney giggles, which might be a sign
that she is very happy and knows that she can't be a suspect
because lamb, which was the weapon, was already eaten.