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Pacenia
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Who is Roberto Mamani Mamani? Let us imagine a picture of a Bolivian indigenous woman carrying a baby in the typical manner in a blanket on her bag. She is selling: Her hands are overloaded with potatoes and in front of her are lying some sacks with more potatoes. It is a daily and simple scene on a Bolivian farmer’s market, but the artist creates an impressive work out of it. Mamani Mamani has the talent to make us immerge into another world. He makes us see the world differently, makes us feel a wealth of feelings and become impressed of the variety of an unknown culture. Mamani Mamani has created his special way of art. He uses strong colours to create strong feelings.
What we see on his interpretation of the scene is a colourfully stylized image of an indigenous mother. The strong vibrant colours are similar to the Aymaran colours that are used in their traditional hand-made blankets. He makes us see a breathtaking figure of a native woman and manages to merge the potato sacks into the landscape of the Andes.
On the top of the picture radiates the sun. The intensity of it’s yellow and red colours reflect the power that it brings to earth. It’s glistening shine surrounds the woman and creates a mood of aggression and threat. She is painted without a face, also her baby. Her hands are disproportionately big and of the same golden colour as her and her baby’s face, while the potatoes are painted in a soft brown and red colour. She, the potatoes and the undulating mountains, or sacks of potatoes, form a unity in the form of a triangle. But this unity is silhouetted against the denying and suffocating background that encloses the triangle. It catches the main focus of attention while it is surrounded by a filmy white, nerved by a whiff of a red, which brings more stability into the picture and attenuates the aggressiveness of the sanguine and black background. The mountains or potato sacks are of wonderful red, yellow, blue, violet, green and orange shades of colours which we rediscover in the attire of the woman. On this way the artist has emphasized the already described unity of the triangle.

The intensity and variety of the chosen colours is breathtaking. Cold blue and green hues change with warm red, yellow an orange colours and between them is a compensative violet- a mixture of the cold and warm tones- which dissolves the contrast and brings a harmonical interaction between the different colours into being. All the lines in the foreground are rounded and these roundings improve the impression of feminity. The sun is the male part in the painting. It is arced so evenly, that it nearly seems to be a triangle which’s point is not visible behind the woman’s head. The colourfully stylized image of the indigenous woman is an exact reflection of the colourful and ambivalent Andean life. An impulsive and ebullient lifestyle is threatened with the lack of foods. Potatoes are the base of Andean life. The way the woman keeps hold of them in Mamani Mamani’s execution, expresses the importance the potato has to her and her people. The woman represents the stereotype of an indigenous woman, even more as she is portrayed without a face.
The painting also includes the problem that women are threatened by the men of a patriarchal society, represented by the sun and it’s strong shine as the masculine part of the painting. But we can also see that the next generation, which the newborn stands for, is involved into these problems. However, the woman is not touched by her situation. She stands upright and proud, representing the proudness of her culture that keeps on resisting against western influences. At least it is this wish that uposes upon the contemplator. We feel with a whole nation, feel their tradition, pride, preoccupations, their style of life, philosophy and strength.
All these attributes are integrated into this one painting.
All in all Roberto Mamani Mamani has created a work of art out of the visions and feelings of his nation. He shows us a vibrating and vivid world with a unique character, a world full of colours, patterns and emotions.
Roberto Mamani Mamani is the embassador of his folk.




Delfino
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Who is Roberto Mamani Mamani?
Diese Frage wird nicht direkt beantwortet. Deshalb einen gewissen visuellen Abstand zum folgenden Text lassen.
Oder ist Roberto eine Frau?


Let us imagine a picture of a Bolivian indigenous woman carrying a baby in the typical manner in a blanket on her bag.
Her hands are overloaded with potatoes and in front of her are lying some sacks with more potatoes. She is selling.
It is a common and simple scene on a Bolivian farmer’s market,
but the artist creates a deep impression on everyone looking at this picture.
but the artist created an impressive piece of art from this plain situation.
Mamani Mamani has the talent to make us immerse into another world. He makes us see the world differently, makes us feel a wealth of feelings and become impressed by the variety in an unknown culture. Mamani Mamani has created his special way of art. He uses strong colours to create strong feelings.
What we see on this painting is a colourful image of an indigenous mother. The strong vibrant colours are similar to the Aymaran colours that are used in their traditional hand-made blankets. He makes us see a breathtaking figure of a native woman and manages to merge the potato sacks with the landscape of the Andes.

The bright sun is on top of the scene/picture.

to be continued ...
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Keswick
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Sorry, Delfino, dass ich mich einmische, aber im ersten Satz
Let us imagine a picture of a Bolivian indigenous woman carrying a baby in the typical manner in a blanket on her bag.
muss es doch so heissen:
Let us imagine a picture of a Bolivian indigenous woman carrying a baby in the typical manner in a blanket on her back.
Oder? Sie traegt das Baby auf dem Ruecken.
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Delfino
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@Keswick
Klar, das hätte mir natürlich auch sofort auffallen müssen.
Vielleicht kannst du auch den Rest dieses Textes kontrollieren?

Let us imagine a picture of a Bolivian indigenous woman carrying a baby in the typical manner in a blanket on her back.
Her hands are overloaded with potatoes and in front of her are lying some sacks with more potatoes. She is selling.
It is a common and simple scene on a Bolivian farmer’s market,
but the artist creates a deep impression on everyone looking at this picture.
but the artist created an impressive piece of art from this plain situation.
Mamani Mamani has the talent to make us immerse into another world. He makes us see the world differently, makes us feel a wealth of feelings and become impressed by the variety in an unknown culture. Mamani Mamani has created his special way/kind of art. He uses strong colours to create strong feelings.
What we see on this painting is a colourful image of an indigenous mother. The strong vibrant colours are similar to the Aymaran colours that are used in their traditional hand-made blankets. He makes us see a breathtaking figure of a native woman and manages to merge the potato sacks with the landscape of the Andes.

The bright sun is shown on top of the scene. The intensity of it’s yellow and red colours reflect the power that it brings to earth. It’s glistening shine surrounds the woman and creates a mood of aggression and threat. She and her baby are painted without a face. Her hands are disproportionately big and of the same golden colour as her and her baby’s body, while the potatoes are painted in a soft brown and red colour. She, the potatoes and the undulated mountains, or sacks of potatoes, form united form a triangle. This silhouette is shown against this denying and suffocating background that encloses the triangle. It catches the main focus of attention while it is surrounded by a thin white line,
nerved by a whiff of a red,
I'm not sure sure how to improve this part...

which brings more stability into the picture and attenuates the aggressiveness of the sanguine and black background. The mountains or potato sacks are in wonderful red, yellow, blue, violet, green and orange shades which we rediscover in the entire woman. This way the artist has emphasized the already described unity of the triangle.
The intensity and variety of the chosen colours is breathtaking. Cold blue and green hues change with warm red, yellow and orange colours and between them is a compensating violet, a mixture of the cold and warm tones, which dissolves the contrast and allows a harmonic interaction between the different colours. All the lines in the foreground are rounded and these roundings underline the impression of femininity.
The sun is the male part in the painting. It is arced so evenly, that it nearly seems to be a triangle which's point is not visible behind the woman’s head. The colourfully stylized image of the indigenous woman is an exact reflection of the colourful and ambivalent Andean life. An impulsive and ebullient lifestyle is threatened by the lack of food. Potatoes are the base of Andean life. The way the woman keeps hold of them in Mamani Mamani’s painting, symbolises the importance of the potato to her and her people. The woman represents the stereotype of an indigenous woman, even more as she is portrayed without a face.
The painting also includes the problem that women are threatened by the men in a patriarchal society, represented by the sun and it’s strong shine as the masculine part of the painting. But we can also see that the next generation, which the newborn stands for, is involved into these problems. However, the woman is not touched by her situation. She stands upright and proud, representing her culture that keeps on resisting against western influences. This wish is at least signified to the contemplator. We feel with a whole nation, feel their tradition, pride, preoccupations, their style of life, philosophy and strength.
All these attributes are integrated into this one painting.
All in all Roberto Mamani Mamani has created a work of art out of the visions and feelings of his nation.
He shows us a vibrating and vivid world with a unique character, a world full of colours, patterns and emotions.
Roberto Mamani Mamani acts as an ambassador of his folks.

Is this the painting you are trying to describe?
(woman and baby without a face, big hands, sun above them)
I don't see any sacks of potatoes, but a few melons...
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Keswick
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Delfino hat geschrieben:@Keswick
Klar, das hätte mir natürlich auch sofort auffallen müssen.
Vielleicht kannst du auch den Rest dieses Textes kontrollieren?
Gerne, 4 Augen sehen mehr als 2 :wink: .
Delfino hat geschrieben: Let us imagine a picture of a Bolivian indigenous woman carrying a baby in the typical manner in a blanket on her back.
Her hands are overloaded with potatoes and in front of her are lying some sacks with more potatoes. She is selling.
It is a common and simple scene on a Bolivian farmer’s market,
but the artist creates a deep impression on everyone looking at this picture.
but the artist created an impressive piece of art from this plain situation.
Mamani Mamani has the talent to make us immerse into another world. He makes us see the world differently, makes us feel a wealth of feelings and become impressed by the variety in an unknown culture. Mamani Mamani has created his special way/kind of art. He uses strong colours to create strong feelings.
What we see on this painting is a colourful image of an indigenous mother. The strong vibrant colours are similar to the Aymaran colours that are used in their traditional hand-made blankets. He makes us see a breathtaking figure of a native woman and manages to merge the potato sacks with the landscape of the Andes.

The bright sun is shown on top of the scene. The intensity of its yellow and red colours reflects the power that it brings to earth. It’s glistening shine surrounds the woman and creates a mood of aggression and threat. She and her baby are painted without a face. Her hands are disproportionately big and of the same golden colour as her and her baby’s body, while the potatoes are painted in a soft brown and red colour. She, the potatoes and the undulated mountains, or sacks of potatoes, form united form a triangle. This silhouette is shown against this denying and suffocating background that encloses the triangle. It catches the main focus of attention while it is surrounded by a thin white line,
nerved by a whiff of a red,
I'm not sure sure how to improve this part...(same here, please explain)

which brings more stability into the picture and attenuates the aggressiveness of the sanguine and black background. The mountains or potato sacks are in wonderful red, yellow, blue, violet, green and orange shades which we rediscover in the entire woman. This way the artist has emphasized the already described unity of the triangle.
The intensity and variety of the chosen colours is breathtaking. Cold blue and green hues change with warm red, yellow and orange colours and between them is a compensating violet, a mixture of the cold and warm tones, which dissolves the contrast and allows a harmonic interaction between the different colours. All the lines in the foreground are rounded and these roundings underline the impression of femininity.
The sun is the male part in the painting. It is arced so evenly, that it nearly seems to be a triangle which's point is not visible behind the woman’s head. The colourfully stylized image of the indigenous woman is an exact reflection of the colourful and ambivalent Andean life. An impulsive and ebullient lifestyle is threatened by the lack of food. Potatoes are the base of Andean life. The way the woman keeps hold of them in Mamani Mamani’s painting, symbolises the importance of the potato to her and her people. The woman represents the stereotype of an indigenous woman, even more as she is portrayed without a face.
The painting also includes the problem that women are threatened by the men in a patriarchal society, represented by the sun and it’s strong shine as the masculine part of the painting. But we can also see that the next generation, which the newborn stands for, is involved into these problems. However, the woman is not touched by her situation. She stands upright and proud, representing her culture that keeps on resisting against western influences. This wish is at least signified to the contemplator. We feel with a whole nation, feel their tradition, pride, preoccupations, their style of life, philosophy and strength.
All these attributes are integrated into this one painting.
All in all Roberto Mamani Mamani has created a work of art out of the visions and feelings of his nation.
He shows us a vibrating and vivid world with a unique character, a world full of colours, patterns and emotions.
Roberto Mamani Mamani acts as an ambassador of his folks.

Is this the painting you are trying to describe?
(woman and baby without a face, big hands, sun above them)
I don't see any sacks of potatoes, but a few melons...
Bitte keine Korrektur- / Erklärungsanfragen per PN.
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