Kann jemand über meinen Text überschauen?

[Melinskyi]

Ich bin wirklich super schlecht in englischen Texten. Kann da jemand einmal überschauen und ggf. korrigieren. Danke euch. 
Aufgabe war einen 4 tägigen Trip zu planen 
Day one: 

The trip begins at the south entrance of the New York central park. 
There are many Squirrels you can try too feed. 
In the middle of the park is a sea with ducks that you are not allowed to feed.
The next target is the Central Park Zoo, you can find the right route by looking at the sings.
A tour through the zoo without attraction lasts approximately one hour.
You can see your next destination from the Park.
Next we go to the Empire state building. 
This is the highes building of America with 381m. 
The entry kost 55 Dollar. 
After that you go to the times square. 
It’s the most beautiful in the evening, because the lights are very bright then. 
The times square is the fullest at new years eve. 
There is the beautifulest firework you will ever seen. 

Day two:

The day begins at the „Rockefeller Center“.
There you can iceskating in the cold month or rollerskating in the warm month. 
The next stop is the Edge. 
On the roof of this building, you have a beautiful view above the whole city. 
If you like Museum, you can visit the Intrepid Sea-Air-Space Museum.
There you can see some aircraft and submarine. 
At next you visit the Riverside Park. You can find there the Hamilton Fountain and the Eleanor Roosevelt Memorial. 
If you walk across the park you come to the George Washington bridge. 

Day three:

Your third day starts at the coney island park.
There is a big aquarium with a tunnel where the fish swim above you.
Last but noch least, you go in the Mermaid spa to relax well. 

Day four: 

Your last day begins in the Whole Foods marked in Brooklyn.
There you can see lots of food culture of America. 
After that much food, you go to the Brooklyn bridge park for the perfect view of the Brooklyn bride. 
Your last highlight of this trip is the Manhattan mall. 
This is the perfect spot to go shopping. 

[Schuyler]

Ich bin wirklich super schlecht in englischen Texten. Kann da jemand einmal überschauen und ggf. korrigieren. Danke euch. 
Aufgabe war einen 4 tägigen Trip zu planen 

Hallo, Melinskyi! Na dann sehen wir mal ...

Day one: 

The trip begins at the south entrance of the New York Central Park.
There are many squirrels you can try to feed. 
In the middle of the park is a lake with ducks that you are not allowed to feed.
The next target is the Central Park Zoo. You can find the right route by looking at the signs.
A tour through the zoo without attraction* lasts approximately one hour. *Was meinst du damit?
You can see your next destination from the park.
Next we go to the Empire State Building. 
This is the highest building in America at 381m. 
The entry cost is 55 dollars. Oder: Entry costs 55 dollars.
Wenn es mehr als nur ein Dollar ist, steht "dollars" dann im Plural.
After that you go to the Times Square. 
It’s the most beautiful in the evening because the lights are very bright then. 
Times Square is the most crowded on New Year's Eve. In der Tat. Ich war einmal aus Versehen an Silvester dort. Da war es noch nicht mal Nacht und schon konnte man kaum die Luft kriegen.
Then there is the most beautiful firework display you will ever see₁ / you have ever seen₂.

¹... das schönste Feuerwerk, das du je sehen wirst.
²... das schönste Feuerwerk, das du je gesehen hast.

Day two:

The day begins at Rockefeller Center.
There you can ice skate in the cold months or roller skate in the warm months. 
The next stop is the Edge. 
On the roof of this building, you have a beautiful view above the whole city. 
If you like museums, you can visit the Intrepid Sea-Air-Space Museum. Das Museum wird meistens nur "Intrepid Museum" gennant.
There you can see some aircraft and submarine. 
At Next you visit the Riverside Park. You can find the Hamilton Fountain and the Eleanor Roosevelt Memorial there.
If you walk across the park, you come to the George Washington Bridge. 

Day three:

Your third day starts in the Coney Island park.
There is a big aquarium with a tunnel where the fish swim above you. Soweit ich weiß / finden kann gibt es keinen Ort namens "Coney Island Park". Das Aquarium heißt "New York Aquarium" und befindet sich auf Riegelmann Boardwalk in Coney Island.
Last but not least, you go in the Mermaid Spa to enjoy a relaxing break.

Day four: 

Your last day begins at the Whole Foods Market in Brooklyn.
There you can see lots of cultural American food. 
After all that food, you go to the Brooklyn Bridge Park for a perfect view of the Brooklyn Bridge.
Your last highlight of this trip is the Manhattan Mall*. 
This is the perfect spot to go shopping. *Gibt es aber leider nicht mehr seit Covid

Rot = Hier war ein Fehler
Grün = War nicht ganz falsch, aber ich schlage eine Verbesserung vor
Blau = Erklärung/Anmerkung


Gar nicht so schlecht! Die meisten Korrekture beziehen sich nur auf die Rechtschreibung.

Achte immer darauf, ob ein Substantiv ein Eigennamen ist, wie z.B. Central Park, The Empire State Building, Times Square, Riverside Park, The Brooklyn Bridge, usw. Diese sind die Namen bestimmter Orte/Gebäude und nicht nur irgendwelche. Eigennamen werden immer großgeschrieben und man benutzt dabei oft auch keinen Artikel (hängt vom Namen ab).