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[sanane11]

Hallo ,

Kann jemand mir diesen Text korrigieren ?
Es geht mir eher um sprachliche Korrektur.

The newspaper article " x" that was published on 26 April 2007, in the newspaper "Time" and written by x , deals with the importance of Jamestown for the history of America.

The article can be divided into four parts.
The first part ( ll. 1-22) explains the voyage from London to America , which took four month , and the importance of the happenings after Jamestown`s settlement for the American history.

The next part (ll.23-70) is about the problem of overpopulation , unemployment and poverty which were reasons for the emigration from England to America. The challenges that had to be faced by the colonists are listened up as the incompetence of finding sustenance and handle with social problems, the conflict with local Indians who attacked the colonists when they arrived and the not existing of much gold in America ea believed.

The next part (ll. 71-115) explains the conflic between colonists and natives that caused the death of many settlers who were not given food by natives and revenged themselves when ships from England came .Moreover the solution for better living conditions with the engagement of religious outcasts which later led to a religious pluralism in America is stressed.The author mentions the successfull tabacco growers and the african labor source which hepled to improve the social problems.

The last paragraph (ll. 116-150) is about the founding of the general assembly of Jamestown and the second " starving time" where natives killed colonists because of the colonists success of that they were jealous .

To sum up , Jamestown has been the initialplace where the current problems of America appeared first and continue .

Ist dieses gerecht einer Summary ?

[Keswick]

Hallo ,

Kann jemand mir diesen Text korrigieren ?
Es geht mir eher um sprachliche Korrektur.

The newspaper article " x" which was published on 26 April 2007, in the newspaper "Time" and written by x , deals with the importance of Jamestown for the history of America.

The article can be divided into four parts.
The first part ( ll. 1-22) explains the voyage from London to America, which took four months, and the importance of the happenings after Jamestown's settlement for the American history.

The next part (ll.23-70) is about the problem of overpopulation, unemployment and poverty which were reasons for the emigration from England to America. The challenges that had to be faced by the colonists are listened up as the incompetence of finding sustenance and handle with social problems (sorry but I don't understand what you mean with this sentence), the conflict with local Indians who attacked the colonists when they arrived and the not existing of much gold in America ea believed(sorry but I don't understand what you mean with this sentence).

The next part (ll. 71-115) explains the conflict between colonists and natives that caused the death of many settlers who were not given food by natives and revenged themselves when ships from England came (who did?). Moreover the solution for better living conditions with the engagement of religious outcasts which later led to a religious pluralism in America is stressed. The author mentions the successful tabacco growers and the African labor source which helped to improve the social problems.

The last paragraph (ll. 116-150) is about the founding of the general assembly of Jamestown and the second "starving time" where natives killed colonists because of the colonists success of which they were jealous.

To sum up, Jamestown has been the initial place where the current problems of America appeared first and continued.

Ist dieses gerecht einer Summary ?

Einige Saetze sind unverstaendlich, diese muessen nochmal ueberarbeitet werden. Auch sehe ich den Zusammenhang zwischen Jamestown und den heutigen sozialen Problemen in den USA nicht. Obwohl die Probleme bestimmt grundlegend aehnlich waren, sehe ich beispielsweise keinen Zusammenhang zwischen mordenden Einheimischen und Kolonialisten? Die Beispiele in deiner Zusammenfassung sind leider zu waage als dass man Schlussfolgerungen auf die heutige Situation ziehen kann. Vielleicht noch ein paar Beispiele geben (falls im Originaltext vorhanden?) . Ansonsten ein guter Text.

[sanane11]

Hallo,

Vielen Dank für die Hilfe

Also , ich war nicht wirklich in der Lage einiges in einen sinnvollen Satz zu fassen . Kann mir jemand helfen ?

İch will sagen, dass :

1. die ersten Ansiedler aus Europa Probleme hatten ihren Lebensunterhalt zu verdienen.
2. die Ansiedler dachten , dass es in America viel Gold gibt , jedoch später sahen , dass Gold nur in geringen Mengen existiert und man nur auf halbedele Metalle stoßen konnte.

Im Text steht " the place where our nation began to take shape" ( America). Wie soll ich das einbauen ?


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