Kann mal jemand helfen bitte? Geht das?
Also das is 'n Verslein und ich bin noch ganz schön schlecht. Aber egal, gut Ding wil Weile haben.
Irgendwann wird auch die Anfangs so unsterblich scheinende Lüsternheit verfliegen. Doch warum sollte unsere Liebe Schaden nehmen und wir unsere Zärtlichkeit nicht weiterleben? Aus der Hitze wird Wärme werden und wenn uns das nicht erschreckt, wird die Kälte keine Chance haben.
Mein Rohbau. (Bitte lieber kein Kommentar)
Immortally lewdness at the beginning will fly way, any time.
But why should our love to be doing harm and why we are not should to live on our tender loving care?
When the hotness transformed to heat, we have a chance but only when it make us not afraid.
Thx a million!
hÜlfe!
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hi, there are some little mistakes...
Immortal lewdness at the beginning will fly way, any time. But why should our love doing harm and why should we not live on our tender loving care? When the hotness is transformed to heat, we have a chance but only when it makes us not afraid.
Take care of the s in the 3rd Person :
He cares, he takes, she makes
and of your syntax...(-;
should not NOT!!! not should!!!
bye[/u]
Immortal lewdness at the beginning will fly way, any time. But why should our love doing harm and why should we not live on our tender loving care? When the hotness is transformed to heat, we have a chance but only when it makes us not afraid.
Take care of the s in the 3rd Person :
He cares, he takes, she makes
and of your syntax...(-;
should not NOT!!! not should!!!
bye[/u]