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Hallo, ich bin neu hier und wollt mich erst mal vorstellen. Ich bin Thomas 16j und gehe zurzeit in die 10 Klasse einer Realschule in BW :)

Ich habe mein Kurzreferat zu ende geschrieben und wollte wissen ob ihr irgendwelche gramatischen Fehler entdeckt


The first years
The car was not invented overnight.The dream to drive as fast as the birds can fly is very old. The history of the automobile begins in the early 18 th, with the creation of steam-powered automobiles. (Folie)The steam-powered automobile was invented by Nicholas Cugnot a French artillery officer , who actually invented a first machine that was not powered by horses It was obvious, that it wouldn't succeed because when he showed the invention to the high military the machine crashed into a wall. Cugnot forgot to install a brake which could stop the machine. And in the beginning when the people didn't know how to handle these novel vehicles there were many accidents. In the first year in Britain 900 people lost their life because of a accident with a steam-powered car. So the British government decided for a law which was called by people ,,The red flag act”(Folie) which says that every vehicle that ist not powered by horses is allowed to drive with maximum of 4 miles an hour and that somebody else has to go in front of the car with a red flag and has to warn people.he steam-powered automobiles lost popularity when the petrol engine was invented. Why loosed it popularity ? The petrol powered vehicles achieved a higher speed,did not have to carry wood or coal with it and reached a greater scope.
The first four-bar engine was invented by Nicolaus Otto. In the year 1864 Nicolaus Otto founded with Eugen Langen the company ,,Deutz” which produces engines until today for ships and Farm Machinery. But the first real car which was driven with petrol was invented by Carl Benz in the year 1886 (Folie). The biggest wish of the German engineer was to change the world . He wanted a world in which the distance does not matter. And he succeeded. His invention is still regarded as best invention of the humanity. The first cross-country trip took Bertha Benz in August 1888 from Mannheim to Pforzheim and back . It went pretty quickly from the light gasoline, naphtha, therefore she had to refuel which was sold as a cleaner in pharmacies. So the city was the first gas station in the world

Cars today
In the 20th century, the technology changed in the cars and the cars themselves very much. Probably the best invention in the history of automobiles was the airbag. (Folie) It has saved since its invention even thousands of people. According to one study, the number of victims has decreased since the introduction of air bags by about 46%. How does it work? Depending on the vehicle he opens from 20-30Km/h.Apropos its not a real balloon, but an air bag, which the expelled gas is released again, so that one is caught gently. If he stays inflated, it would have the adverse effect that the head is thrown back again. He is usually triggered by pressure sensors in the front of the vehicle.


Of course, the car simplified our everyday life and allows us to cover vast distances with little effort. But we have to think about our environment. An avarage car produces about 180 g Co2 and if we add up the number of automobiles in Germany, we come to an enormous number which damages the environment every day.



Grüße Thomas




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Re: Englischreferat

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Hallo Thomas! Schön, dass du deinen Weg hierher gefunden hast! :mrgreen: Deinen Text fand ich sehr interessant (Autos sind ja wohl Männersache!), der ist dir wirklich sehr gut gelungen. Allerdings bin ich ja so ein pingeliger Typ und gebe dir mal ein paar Vorschläge, über die du dich so richtig hermachen kannst! Viel Spaß damit ;)
lotusx94 hat geschrieben:The first years
The car was not invented overnight. The dream to drive as fast as the birds can fly is very old. The history of the automobile began in the early 18th century, with the creation of steam-powered automobiles. (Folie)The steam-powered automobile was invented by Nicholas Cugnot, a French artillery officer, who was the first to invented a machine (besser: "vehicle") that was not powered by horses. It was obvious, that it wouldn't succeed, because when he showed the invention to the high military ("the high military" gibt es nicht. Was meinst du hier? "to a high-ranking military officer"?), the machine crashed into a wall. (Besser: As soon as he demonstrated his invention to ?a high-ranking military officer?, it was clear that it wouldn't suceed: the machine crashed straight into a wall.) Cugnot had forgotten to install a brake which could stop the machine (besser: "to install a brake, which meant that the machine could not be stopped"). In the beginning, (besser: "in the early days of steam-powered automobiles", denn von Cugnots Fahrzeug ist jetzt gar nicht mehr die Rede, oder?) when the people didn't know how to handle these novel vehicles yet, there were many accidents. In the first year of their invention, 900 peoplein Britainlost their lives because of a accident with a steam-powered car. As a result of this, the British government passed a law which was commonly known as the "Red Flag Act", (Folie) which decreed (dieses Gesetz gibt es schließlich nicht mehr: da muss eine Vergangenheitsform her) that every vehicle which was not not powered by horses was allowed to drive at a maximum speed of 4 miles an hour, and that somebody else had to walk in front of the car with a red flag and has to warn peoplethat it was coming. The steam-powered automobiles lost popularity when the petrol engine was invented. Why did it lose popularity? (besser: "Why was this?") There were various reasons: the petrol-powered vehicles achieved (besser: "were capable of achieving") a higher speed, did not need a constant supply of wood or coal with it and reached a greater scope. ("scope" ist nicht ganz das richtige Wort. Was war hier dein Ausgangssatz?)

The first four-bar engine was invented by Nicolaus Otto. In the year 1864, Nicolaus Otto founded the company ,,Deutz
with Eugen Langen,which still produces ship engines until today for ships and farm machineryto this day. However, the first real petrol-powered car which was driven with petrol was invented by Carl Benz in the year 1886 (Folie). TheGerman engineer'sgreatest wish was to change the world. He wanted to create a world in which the distance does not matter (oder: "is irrelevant"/"makes no odds"): and he succeeded. His invention is still regarded as humanity's best invention of the humanity (oder wolltest du eigentlich sagen: "the best invention in human history"?). In August 1888, Bertha Benz made the first cross-country trip from Mannheim to Pforzheim and back. It went pretty quickly from the light gasoline, naphtha, therefore she had to refuel which was sold as a cleaner in pharmacies. So ist dieser Satz leider gar nicht sinnvoll. Ich habe mal so ein bisschen recherchiert und würde folgendes vorschlagen: "At the time, the benzine needed to fuel these cars was only available in pharmacies, which meant that she had to frequently stop in various towns to refuel," so, in this way, the city of Wiesloch became the world's first gas station

Cars today
In the 20th century, both the technology in the cars and the cars themselves changed very much (besser: "dramatically"). Probably (besser: "Arguably") the best invention in the history of the automobiles was that of the airbag. (Folie) Since its invention, it has saved the lives of even thousands of people. According to one study, the number of fatalities in motor accidents has decreased by about 46% since the introduction of the airbags. How does it work? Depending on the vehicle, it opens when a sensor inside the car detects a collision force of 20-30 km/h. It should be noted that an airbag is not actually a real balloon, but rather a bag of air, into which a gas is released on collision, causing the bag to inflate and cushion the fall of the driver of the car. If it were to stay inflated, this would have the adverse effect of throwing the driver's headbackagain, so the bag automatically deflates again immediately. It is usually triggered by pressure sensors in the front of the vehicle.

Of course, (besser: "It cannot be denied that") the car has simplified our everyday life and allowed us to cover vast distances with little effort. However, we have to think about (oder: "consider its effect on") our environment. An average car produces about 180 grams of carbon dioxide per kilometer: if we add up the number of automobiles in Germany, we come to an enormous number, which damages the environment every day.
Ich würde mich sehr darüber freuen, wenn ihr mich auf alle Deutschfehler aufmerksam machen würdet!

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Die "high military" wird wohl eher der Plural "high-ranking military officers" sein, denn Cugnot handelte in offiziellem Auftrag des Kriegsministeriums.
choccy_hobnob hat geschrieben:
lotusx94 hat geschrieben:900 peoplein Britainlost their lives because of accidents with a steam-powered cars.
Es war ja sicher nicht nur ein Unfall, oder?
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tiorthan hat geschrieben:Die "high military" wird wohl eher der Plural "high-ranking military officers" sein, denn Cugnot handelte in offiziellem Auftrag des Kriegsministeriums.
Da hast du sicherlich schon recht, danke! :big_thumb:
tiorthan hat geschrieben:
choccy_hobnob hat geschrieben: 900 peoplein Britainlost their lives because of accidents with a steam-powered cars.
Es war ja sicher nicht nur ein Unfall, oder?
Ach du meine Güte, irgendwie liegt diese "a/an" Unterscheidung immer in meinem toten Winkel! Solche Fehler übersehe ich immer wieder gerne :roll:

Aber ich würde immerhin sagen, dass "lost their lives because of an accident" und "lost their lives because of accidents" hier mehr oder weniger gleichwertig sind, wobei "because of accidents" irgendwie "klobiger" klingt. Von daher bleibe ich bei meinem ersten Vorschlag... solange dieses zusätzliche "n" auch mit dabei ist ;)
Ich würde mich sehr darüber freuen, wenn ihr mich auf alle Deutschfehler aufmerksam machen würdet!

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Ich glaube "because of an accident" ist richtiger, die mathematische Logik hat mir hier einen Streich in der Wahrnehmung gespielt.
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