Englisch-Korrektur

[star.*]

Hey,

ist das sprachlich und inhaltlich richtig?

The war of independence
The war of independence is a act of rebellion caused war, which ends with the 13 British colonies declares their independence from Britain.

The civil war
This war between the northern states and the the states in the South was caused by the deep economic, social and political division between the states, which came mainly in the slavery issue to light.

Immigration and Industrialisation
The industrialisation is operated by the West with its huge natural resources of oil and timber, many immigrants from Europe and the construction of the railway.

The First World War
America`s entry into the First World War, in cooperation with Britain and France led to the defeat of Germany and Austria.

The great depression and the new deal
During severe economic crisis of the 1930s Franklin D. Roosevelt was elected President on at platform of social reform and industrial recovery called the New Deal and in this way the federal governement spent a lot of money on infrastructure.


The second world war
The USA and Germany declared war on each other after it attacked its navel base at Pearl Harbor in Hawaii.

The cold war
The cold war is a conflict between the U.S. and the Soviet Union, which ends in victory for the Americans and the collapse of the Soviet Union in 1989.

Social reform
The social reform includes the prohibition of racial segregation and welfare programs and although they have made great progress, the problem continues to lie in this area.


Danke

[caro64]

Hallo star, leider nicht sprachlich und auch nicht inhaltlich korrekt

[star.*]

Die ersten beiden Sätze habe ich jetzt überarbeitet

The War of Independence was a conflict initiated by the British King as the answer to [----] the 13 British colonies` declaring their independence from Britain.

The Civil War between the Northern [---] and the [---] Southern States [---] resulted from [---] a deep economic, social and political division between the states, [---] with the issue of slavery as its ostensible cause.
Was ist denn beim nächsten Satz falsch?

Und ich soll das alles in Form einer summary schreiben--d.h. simple present

[Duckduck]

Die ersten beiden Sätze habe ich jetzt überarbeitet

The War of Independence was a conflict initiated by the British King as the answer to [----] the 13 British colonies` declaring their independence from Britain.

The Civil War between the Northern [---] and the [---] Southern States [---] resulted from [---] a deep economic, social and political division between the states, [---] with the issue of slavery as its ostensible cause.
Was ist denn beim nächsten Satz falsch?

Und ich soll das alles in Form einer summary schreiben--d.h. simple present

Hi star,
ich verstehe Deine Aufgabe nicht.
Du hast eine Reihe von Definitionen für Begriffe aus der Geschichte der USA hingeschrieben. Das ist in keiner Weise eine Zusammenfassung von irgendetwas, sondern es sind nur voneinander unabhängige Begriffserklärungen (mit Fehlern versehen, wie Caro richtig anmerkte).
Und wieso meinst Du, dass Du hier das Präsens verwenden sollst? Weil das die häufig verwendete Zeit für "summaries" ist? Ja, aber hier ist doch gar keine "summary" zu sehen?!

Bitte noch mehr Informationen!

Duckduck