Frauenbild um 1959

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Avrina1991
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Frauenbild um 1959

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Hallo,
ich soll in Englische ein Kurzvortrag zu dem Thema "image of women in the 1950" machen. nur leider bin ich in englisch total schlecht und hoffe dehalb auf eure Hilfe.
Hat jemand vielleicht ein paar gute Internetseiten, wo ich was darüber finde?
Ich hoffe es findet sich jemand,der das für mich Korrektur lesen könnte.

Hier ist der Text schon mal:
The political situation around 1959 was art. The men are coming back from the second world war and the women worked very hart to live without the men. The woman must do the work of the men since they are at the war. So many woman are working at the fabrics when the men are coming back. Because of the coming back of them the woman must make room for the male workers. They make the woman to go back to the home. But many soldiers died in the war and the wives are widowed. And so they must work and make the house together alone. But the other woman,who find their men back, like to go back to home. But often the money was too little to live from. And s they must go working. The woman at the work had the same time to work,but they did not get the same money as a male worker. The most of the woman lumped it. But the annual rate of divorces were big,so not all of them are happy about this situation.
Vielen vielen dank für die Hilfe schon mal im voraus!!

Liebe grüße,Nicole




Delfino
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Re: Frauenbild um 1959

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Avrina1991 hat geschrieben: Hallo,
ich soll in Englisch einen Kurzvortrag zu dem Thema "'The image of women in the 1950s" machen.
nur leider bin ich in Englisch total schlecht und hoffe dehalb auf eure Hilfe.
Hat jemand vielleicht ein paar gute Internetseiten, wo ich was darüber finde?
Ich hoffe es findet sich jemand, der meinen Entwurf für mich korrekturlesen kann.

Hier ist der Text:

The situation for the women in Germany around 1950 was hard. Only a few men came back after the Second World War and therefore women had to work very hard to earn enough money for their live without the men. The woman had to do the work of the men since they left to fight in the war. So many woman were working at the factories when the men were coming back. When the men returned the woman had to leave these jobs. Many tousends of them had lost their husbands and the father of their children. So these widows had to find new work because they could not afford to stay at home with their kids. Some of the lucky women whose husbands did came back were happy to do so. But very often the amount of money that the man earned was not enough for the family including possible children. Therefore both of them had to work. Although the women worked the same time as the men they did not get payed the same wage as a male worker. The majority of the woman had to ignore this injustice. But the annual rate of divorces was so high that many women could not accept this situation. These difficult circumstances for single females at that time may have been one of the things that lead to the feminist movement later on.

Vielen, vielen Dank für die Hilfe schon mal im Voraus!!

Liebe Grüße,
Nicole
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Keswick
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Re: Frauenbild um 1959

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Avrina1991 hat geschrieben:Hallo,
ich soll in Englische ein Kurzvortrag zu dem Thema "image of women in the 1950" machen. nur leider bin ich in englisch total schlecht und hoffe dehalb auf eure Hilfe.
Hat jemand vielleicht ein paar gute Internetseiten, wo ich was darüber finde?
Ich hoffe es findet sich jemand,der das für mich Korrektur lesen könnte.

Hier ist der Text schon mal:
The political situation around 1950 was hard. The men were coming back from the Second World War and the women worked very hard to make a living without the men. The women had to do the work of the men since they were at the war. So many women were working at the fabrics when the men came back. Because of their return the women had to make room for the male workers. They made the women to go back to the home. But many soldiers died during the war and the wives became widows. And so they had to work and make the house together alone (das macht keinen Sinn). But the other women, whose men came back liked the idea of going back home. But often the money was too little to live from. And so they had to find work. The women at the work had the same time to do the work, but they did not get the same money as a male worker. Most women accept it. But the annual rate of divorces were high because not all of them were happy about this situation.
Vielen vielen Dank für die Hilfe schon mal im Vorraus!!

Liebe Grüße, Nicole
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Avrina1991
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Re: Frauenbild um 1959

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danke für die Korrektur!!


Hier ist nochmal ein Teil und ich bin wider dankbar für eine Verbesserung:

At the Second world war the woman must live without the men. They have to do the male work and the fabrics depend on the female. But they get 60% less the pay for the men. The most of all are assistances, not real workers. Because the education for woman are not traditional and the woman seams to be unintelligent and to bad for knowledge.
The woman are stressed out because of the work and the household. The woman must do all what the men done and work at home at one person and so it was very hart. When then the men comes back, the woman breath a sigh of relief. Also the wives want to have the old stability of the past life.
And the family starts to be very important because the people are weak from the war. And the people are manipulate from the politican. The politic want the same situation than bevore the war. They want to have the woman at home,not at work. So they starts teach the woman that it is very importtant to be a good housewife. And that it is the sence of the living to make your housband happy. The beeing sence of the woman was to make a good home for the men.

Die Gliederung in Einleitung-Hauptteil und Schluss mache ich,wenn ich erstmal ein paar Texte als Grundgerüst geschrieben habe. Aber danke für die Hilfe!

Liebe Grüße.Nicole

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Re: Frauenbild um 1959

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Avrina1991 hat geschrieben:Danke für die Korrektur!

Hier ist noch einmal ein Text und ich wäre wieder dankbar für eine Verbesserung:

During the Second World War the woman had to live without the men. They had to do their work and therefore the factories depended on the female workforce. Unfortunately they earned 60% less than the men. Most of them were assistants and not experienced workers because the education system was traditional and treated the woman as unintelligent beings which were not good smart enough to gain more knowledge.
The woman are usually stressed because they had a job and manage the household. The woman had to do everything the men had done and worked at home. So it was very hard for all of them. When then the men returned the woman were reliefed. The wifes wanted to enjoy the stability of their former life.
The family started to be very important again because the people were weaked by the war. People were manipulated by the propaganda of the politican. The politicians wanted to create the same situation as it was before the war. They want the woman to stay at home and not at work. So they started to promote the very traditional role of a woman again and emphasised that it is very important to be a good wife. The meaning of a womans life was to make her husband happy by creating a nice home which implied to be a housewife and to take care of the children.

Die Gliederung in Einleitung, Hauptteil und Schluss mache ich nachdem ich ein paar Texte als Grundgerüst geschrieben habe.
Aber Danke für die Hilfe!

Liebe Grüße.
Nicole
Leider hattest du einige der Fehler aus dem ersten Teil hier wiederholt. :(
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Avrina1991
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Re: Frauenbild um 1959

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Vielen vielen Dank nochmals.

Hier ist auch schon der vorläufig letzte Teil von der Präsentation.

The image of woman is also shown in the book “Dead Poet Society”. Extremely in the end, where Neil is at home with his parents after the acting. His father is gutted about Neil. Mr. Perry don't see an other resort than sending Neil to a military school. Neil hate this idea, but he is afraid of disagree his father. His mother noticed what her son feels, but he won't answer his husband back. This is a typical reaction in the 1950th. The woman don't agree with his men,but it is normal that the husband is always correct in all he do and so they don't say anything again.
An other example for the women image is the response of the headmaster Nolan to Charlie's calling. He has published an article in the students paper to having girls at school. Nolan was very gutted about it and Charlie were getting much punish. The typical image of the woman was that he isn't good enough for learning other things beside housework. And if someone is against this picture of a woman, they were punished.

Ich beziehe mich da auf das englische Buch "Dead Poet Society",was wir in Englisch lesen.

Danke für die gute Hilfe!

MfG,Nicole

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Re: Frauenbild um 1950

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Avrina1991 hat geschrieben: The image of woman is also characterized in certain parts of the book “Dead Poet Society”. Especially \ For instance at the end
when Neil is at home with his parents after his unexpected performance in the play. His father is very disapointed by Neil.
He, Mr. Perry, doesn't see an other solution than to carry out his threat by sending Neil away to a military school.
Neil obviously hates this idea, but he is to afraid to openly disagree with his father. His mother notices the feelings of her son,
but she doesn't dare to disagree (openly) with her husband either.
This is a typical reaction of women in the 1950th. The wife doesn't disagree with her husband. He is the one
who decides everything for the family and what he thinks is the only true point of view. There is no discussion about it.


Another example of the women's image is the response of the headmaster Nolan to Charlie's calling. He has published an article
in the students paper about having girls at school. Nolan was very angry about it and Charlie was getting much punish.
This shows the typical image of women at that time. They were characterized as not good enough to learn
anything besides managing the household. Anyone trying to change this traditional picture of a woman's meanig of life
was
punished (like a heretic).

Ich beziehe mich dabei auf das englische Buch "Dead Poet Society", das wir in Englisch gelesen haben.

Danke für die gute Hilfe!

MfG,
Nicole

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Re: Frauenbild um 1959

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Avrina1991 hat geschrieben: The image of woman is also characterized in certain parts of the book “Dead Poet Society”. Especially \ For instance at the end
when Neil is at home with his parents after his unexpected performance in the play. His father is very disapointed by Neil.
He, Mr. Perry, doesn't see an other solution than to carry out his threat by sending Neil away to a military school.
Neil obviously hates this idea, but he is to afraid to openly disagree with his father. His mother notices the feelings of her son,
but she doesn't dare to disagree (openly) with her husband either.
This is a typical reaction of women in the 1950th. The wife doesn't disagree with her husband. He is the one
who decides everything for the family and what he thinks is the only true point of view. There is no discussion about it.


Another example of the women's image at this time is the response of the headmaster Nolan to Charlie's call. He admitted
to be
the author of an article published in the students paper about having girls at school. Nolan was very angry about it
and therefore Charlie was getting punished immediately.
This shows the typical image of women at that time. They were characterized as not good enough to learn
anything besides managing the household. Anyone trying to change this traditional picture of a woman's meanig of life
was
punished (like a heretic).

Ich beziehe mich dabei auf das englische Buch "Dead Poet Society", das wir in Englisch gelesen haben.

Danke für die gute Hilfe!

MfG,
Nicole

having girls at school - this sounds like girls are part of the inventory (e.g. We are now having computers at school.)

I've seen this movie some time ago but I have never read the book.
I'm sorry, but I'm not sure what Charlie's article was about.
open the school to girls / sharing the school with girls / demanding higher education for girls / ...

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Avrina1991
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Re: Frauenbild um 1959

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Danke für die tolle Hilfe!!!!

Vielen dank,hat mir wirklich sehr geholfen.

fürs erste bin ich fertig;-)

lg,nicole

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