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Ostschnitte
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Korrektur eines Textes

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Hallo,
hier ein Text von mir, ich weiß, dass ziemlich viele Fehler drin sein werden, weil sich einiges echt strange anhört :)
Vielen Dank schon mal

The history of „Ed Hardy“

- At the whole world there are so many fashion labels- successful or less successful- everyone with its own style and history
- Christian Audigier, this name is so popular as his label Ed Hardy
- He has great connections to the stars
- He is the alpha dog in the fashion branch
- No other fashion collection is wearing so often by stars as Ed Hardy
- Christian Audigier lives the “American Dream”
 he begun his career as salesman of jeans
 soon the Jeans company “Lee” becomes advertent of his store because he brought very high sales figures
 Christian Audigier became a position in the management of the jeans company
- his secret of success: take a successful niched label, which has first fans and layer, let this wearing by stars and don´t sell it as usual, sell a special attitude to life; the celebrities will follow trendsetter in the metropolises and after all the rest of the world  your label become a mainstream
- Christian Audigiers real assets is his connection to the celebrities
- Celebrities like R&B star Ciara, actor Jamie Foxx, Madonna, Mariah Carey, David Beckham, Paris Hilton, Britney Spears, Justin Timberlake, Nicole Richie and Lewis Hamilton wearing “Ed Hardy”
- The tattoo vintage wear is decorated with colourful motives, which evocative of the Japanese Yakuza
- In Germany “Ed Hardy” emerges by the show “Germanys next Top model”: there the girls visited Christian Audigier in one of his stores and presented his clothes at a fashion show


- Christian Audigier was born in 1958 and grew up in Avignon in France (he has his distinctive French accent still)
- He grew up without his father and had to work hard for his objective
- He didn´t regret his adoption because it help him to become world fame
- Antecedent he wanted to become a rock star, but he didn´t sing good enough for it
- He wanted to be highly acclaimed and admired
- Now he is part of the fame of the celebrities of music and film and topmodels
- He create what he dreamed about in his childhood, to become a star, in a short time


- the first time he saw clothes of the fameless tattoo designer Don Ed Hardy (Donald Edward Hardy) was 2004
- in the store they endow him a shirt because of his high profile (Bekanntheit)
- he weared it the same night in a café and everyone asked him about his new fashion line
- so the idea was born: Christian Audigier wanted to start a new fashion collection with Don Ed Hardy, it seams that Christian Audigier had the right intuition for new trends
- Don Ed Hardy studied in the 70th and 80th in Japan, there he combined his own style with distinctive Asian influences, which based on mystic and legendary symbols
- The tattoo artist prettify many celebrities with his kind of art
- Christian Audigier buy the rights from Don Ed Hardy, who settle down in Hawaii
- shortly after he sent the first designs of his vintage- wear collection to his celebrity friends, so in a few days a dozen of celebrities wearing his new collection all around the world and his label “Ed Hardy” became the best advertisement it could get
- free PR the whole year and all around the world
- Christian Audigier knows because of his experiences with “Van Dutch” that fashion labels could have a short endurance, that´s why he licenses his fashion label to other producer: so we have Ed Hardy perfume and Ed Hardy soft drinks
- He has a label contract with “New Wave Fragrances” for his perfume “Ed Hardy by Christian Audigier Fragcrances for women and men“
- The collection will be sold in 2000 stores, other stores will be for example “Macy´s”, “Bloomingdale´s” “Bon Ton” and “Carson´s”
- The perfume bottle for women is decorated with the “Ed Hardy” logo “Love kills slowly”, the bottle for men is designed with a tiger in the typical “Ed Hardy” style
- The perfumes were created by Givaudan’s Parfümeuren
- In the last year Christian Audigier earning 114 Mio. US $ with “Ed Hardy” and the trend curve turn upward
- In the entire USA new “Ed Hardy” stores arises
- Worldwide there are circa 40 “Ed Hardy” stores
- Freedom, rebellion and passion in one name- Ed Hardy




Keswick
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Re: Korrektur eines Textes

Beitrag von Keswick »

Hallo Ostschnitte,

ich habe gerade angefangen deinen Text zu kontrollieren, habe dann aber aufgehoert. Ich mache es wirklich gerne, aber gehe erst bitte deinen Text nochmal durch. Du verwendest viele Woerter, die in dem Zusammenhang nicht stimmen und ich kann einfach den Sinn nicht rauslesen. Also nutze bitte Leo.org oder aehnliches und gehe den Text nochmal durch. Dann sehe ich ihn mir gerne wieder an. Danke und nichts fuer ungut!
Bitte keine Korrektur- / Erklärungsanfragen per PN.
British English (BE) Sprecher.

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