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La-dolce-vita
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Beitrag von La-dolce-vita »

Hallo, wäre nett wenn sich jemand die Zeit nehmen könnte den/die Text(e) ^^ durchzugehen und verbessern. Ich nehme auch gerne bessere Ausdrücke usw. an. :wink:

Dear Steve,
There’s April. I hope that you wondered where I have been the last whole time. But I first I have to say: I’m so sorry! I’m really sorry Steve! Maybe we will not see us again the rest of our life.
We’re now in the Witness Security Program and life has changed completely , only because of Dad’s stupid job. Why did he have to be so egoistic?
It’s logical that an agent of the FBI has a risky life. And why did he have to be a witness at that stupid case. I could be home now and sitting next to you but instead I’m sitting somewhere on the world and can’t talk to anyone. You and my other friends definitely thought that I’m dead… It’s so stupid that I mustn’t even tell you that I’m in this silly program. O.K., I accept that I mustn’t tell you where we live now and what our new names are but I don’t understand why I’m not allowed to tell you at least that I’m still alive! But I had to tell you about the whole story. Surely you can imagine that this has to stay your secret…
The only thing I can do now, is pray and hope that everything will pass as fast as possibly. But I’m afraid that this won’t happen. Maybe we will live the rest of our life in this horrible Witness Security Program. But if this happens, I'm going to kill myself, because that wouldn't be real life anymore. You can’t hide from one person your whole life! Life is full of challenges, which you have to deal with.
Now I’m going to bed because I need energy to cope with my challenges.
Good night!





Canada:
Dear Steve,
You can’t imagine how wonderful Canada is! The weather is perfect, the nature is really beautiful and we’ve also seen a lot of animals! You won’t believe but we’ve even seen a polar bear, which was feeding on a seal. It was very exciting to observe this bear, because I was permanently afraid that it notices and attacks us. But in the end the bear was completely peaceful.
Anyway, yesterday we were in Ottawa, the capital city of Canada, which has more than 800,000 inhabitants and where two different languages are spoken, namely English and French. But unfortunately I have to say that the city wasn’t very interesting. We only saw the Basilica ,,Notre-Dame d'Ottawa‘‘ which was quite boring und some Canadian museums, which were like usual museums and so to say also boring.
Tomorrow we want to see the Jasper National Park. It’s the largest of Canada’s Rocky Mountains parks, covering 10,800 km². But the main reasons why we want to see Jasper National Park are the excellent fishing, rafting and climbing possibilities. And in the winter you can also go skiing/snowboarding, waterfall ice climbing and a lot of other interesting activities.
And now at the end of my letter I want to tell you something about food in Canada. First I have to say that it’s altogether like Austrian food but one thing is really delicious: The Maple Syrup. It’s the sap of the maple tree and eaten with pancakes, waffles or bread. It tastes a little bit like nuts but sweeter. Maybe I will take some bottles of Maple Syrup with me home, so you can also taste that tasty Syrup.
See you soon,




ella85
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Registriert: 23. Apr 2009 13:22
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Wohnort: Australia

Beitrag von ella85 »

Dear Steve,
It's April. I hope that you wondered where I have been since i last wrote. But first I have to say: I’m so sorry! I’m really sorry Steve! Maybe we will not meet again for the rest of our lives.
We’re now in the Witness Security Program and life has changed completely , only because of Dad’s stupid job. Why did he have to be so egotistic? (ich bin nicht sicher das ist richtig)
It’s logical that an agent of the FBI has a risky life. And why did he have to be a witness at that stupid case. I could be home now and sitting next to you but instead I’m sitting somewhere in the world and can’t talk to anyone. You and my other friends definitely thought that I’m dead… It’s so stupid that I mustn’t even tell you that I’m in this silly program. O.K., I accept that I mustn’t tell you where we live now and what our new names are but I don’t understand why I’m not allowed to tell you at least that I’m still alive! But I had to tell you about the whole story. Surely you can imagine that this has to stay secret… The only thing I can do now, is pray and hope that everything will pass as quickly as possibly. But I’m afraid that this won’t happen. Maybe we will live the rest of our lives in this horrible Witness Security Program. But if this happens, I'm going to kill myself, because that wouldn't be real life anymore. You can’t hide from one person your whole life! Life is full of challenges, which you have to deal with.
Now I’m going to bed because I need energy to cope with my challenges.
Good night!





Canada:
Dear Steve,
You can’t imagine how wonderful Canada is! The weather is perfect, the nature is really beautiful and we’ve also seen a lot of animals! You won’t believe it, but we’ve even seen a polar bear, which was feeding on a seal. It was very exciting to observe this bear, because I was constantly afraid that it would notice and attack us. But in the end the bear was completely peaceful.
Anyway, yesterday we were in Ottawa, the capital city of Canada, which has more than 800,000 inhabitants and where two different languages are spoken, namely English and French. But unfortunately I have to say that the city wasn’t very interesting. We only saw the Basilica ,,Notre-Dame d'Ottawa‘‘ which was quite boring und some Canadian museums, which were like usual museums and so to say also boring.
Tomorrow we want to see the Jasper National Park. It’s the largest of Canada’s Rocky Mountains parks, covering 10,800 km². But the main reasons why we want to see Jasper National Park are the excellent fishing, rafting and climbing possibilities. And in the winter you can also go skiing/snowboarding, waterfall ice climbing and a lot of other interesting activities.
And now at the end of my letter I want to tell you something about food in Canada. First I have to say that it’s altogether like Austrian food but one thing is really delicious: The Maple Syrup. It’s the sap of the maple tree and eaten with pancakes, waffles or bread. It tastes a little bit like nuts but sweeter. Maybe I will take some bottles of Maple Syrup with me home, so you can also taste that tasty Syrup.
See you soon,

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