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forenferkel
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Hi

da ich vermute das mein Text gramatikalisch nicht 100% richtig ist, bitte ich euch da einmal drüber zu schauen. *peinlich*

Ab durch die Hecke.

The Movie „Ab durch die Hecke“ is about a Raccoon Richi who is stealing all food of the bear Vincent. The bear wake up and see that Richi will steal the food. The food fall down a cliff on the street and a LKW drove over it. Richi must promised that he bring the food within one week back or the bear kill him. Richi go into a city and find friends. The squirrel Hammy, the turtle Verne and the skunk stella.
He will use the her friends to collect the foot from the humans in the city. But the inhabitans from the city see the animals an call a animal catcher. The friends collect all food and think that the foot is for the next hibernation but richi will give all foot the bear back. The animal catcher catch all friends and the bear meet richi. Richi give the foot back but is unhappy about the situation taht her friends ar catched. He throw the foot again on the street tostop the LKW with his friends and rescue there. The animal catcher catch now the bear.


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The Movie „Over The Hedge" from DreamWorks Animation is about a raccoon Richi who is stealing all the food of the bear Vincent. The bear wakes up and sees that Richi is stealing his food. The food falls down a hill onto the street and a lorry drives right over it. Now Richi has to promise the bear that he will collect enough food within one week or the bear will kill him. Richi goes into a adjacent neighbourhood and finds new friends - the squirrel Hammy, the turtle Verne and the skunk Stella.
He decides to use his friends to collect the food from the humans in this city. Unfortunately the inhabitants of the city see the animals and call an animal catcher. The friends continue to collect all food and think it is for the next hibernation period but Richi has to give the food back to the bear. The animal catcher catches all his friends and Richi meets the bear again. Richi gives the foot back but is very unhappy about the situation that his friends are caught. He throws the foot onto the street again to stop the lorry with his captured friends and rescues them. Now the animal catcher catches the bear.

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