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SamiraX
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Bitte um eine Korrektur zu 2 kurzen Texten

Beitrag von SamiraX »

Hey. Es wäre lieb, wenn jemand die kurzen Texte korrigieren könnte:

Outline the protagonist’s feelings while he is unemployed.
At first the protagonist wants to block the situation out. He flies to Las Vegas and gambles all his money. He doesn’t want to talk with his friends, because he is ashamed of having no job.
He also is ashamed to go to the bank to cash the cheque of his wife, because he is afraid what people could say.
In his time off he works at home and cleans the house and sometimes he prepares dinner.
At the end he is depressed, because he is feeling like no real man and everyone has a job.
Then he decides to start an own business, one day.

What role does his wife play in his new situation?

In my opinion his wife stands behind him and helps him as good as she can. But out of the sight from her man she doesn’t care about him and wants to humble him with her cheques.

Mit freundlichen Grüßen Samira




michael123
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Beitrag von michael123 »

Generally pretty good. A few points:

He also is ashamed - He is also ashamed

to cash the cheque of his wife - to cash his wife's cheque

people could say - people might say

At the end - In the end

because he is feeling like no real man and everyone has a job - because he doesn't feel like a man as everyone else has a job

Then he decides to start an own business, one day - Then one day he decides to start his own business.

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