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[jojo-maus]

Hallo, ich schreibe nächsten Dienstag eine Englisch Arbeit, hab den Text schon bekommen über den Fragen gestellt werden. Eine Freundin hat letztes Jahr über den selben geschrieben und mit ihre Arbeit als Übung gegeben. Ich habe die erste Frage "How has the Sheppard family's life changed? Describe the situation before/during/after the experiment. Der Text um den es sich handelt heißt "Turn-off Switched on our Brains". Ihr müsst meinen Text etwas korigieren weil ich bin nicht gut in Englisch. Danke schön


1. The Sheepard family have taken part (mitgemacht) in an experiment to find out about the influence of television in their daily life. Before the experiment started they didn’t imagine to live without a television. Because every part of the family were dependent of the TV.
As the twelve-day experiment has started, the television were taken away from the flat. Everybody has got depression and were frantic. The feel in the family was like the death of somebody.
Denise describes that she felt awful in the first days. But the experiement changed on a positiv way. After six days the Sheepard family started talking to each other. They did things together, what they didn’t do before. They played games and they went swimming.
After this twelve days the television was not any longer the middle in their family’s life.
Peter was an addict now he uses his spare time for other things. The mother Denise has started writing a romantic novel. Today the Sheppard family sit in the kitchen and play games or talk to each other. They prefer the togetherness as they watch television all the time.


Lg Jojo

[Keswick]

1. The Sheepard family have taken part (mitgemacht) in an experiment to find out about the influence of television on their daily life. Before the experiment started they couldn't imagine to live without a television. Because every member of the family was addicted on the TV.
As the twelve-day experiment has started, the televisions were taken away from the flat. Everybody were depressed and frantic. The feeling in the family was like somebody had died.
Denise describes that she felt awful in the first days. But the experiment improved the situation. After six days the Sheepard family started talking with each other. They did things together, what they didn’t do before. They played games and they went swimming.
After the twelve days the television was no longer the centre of their family’s life.
Peter was an addict, now he uses his spare time for other things. The mother Denise has started writing a romantic novel. Today the Sheppard family sits in the kitchen and plays games or the family members talk to each other. They prefer the togetherness as they only used to watch television all the time.

[StrixVaria]

1. The Sheepard family have taken part (mitgemacht) in an experiment to find out about the influence of television on their daily life. Before the experiment started they couldn't imagine living without a television. Because every member of the family was addicted to the TV.
As the twelve-day experiment has started, the televisions were taken away from the flat. Everybody was depressed and frantic. The feeling in the family was like somebody had died.
Denise describes that she felt awful in the first days. But the experiment improved the situation. After six days the Sheepard family started talking with each other. They did things together, what they didn’t do before. They played games and they went swimming.
After these twelve days, the television was no longer the centre of their family’s life.
Peter was an addict; now he uses his spare time for other things. The mother, Denise, has started writing a romantic novel. Today the Sheppard family sits in the kitchen and plays games or the family members talk to each other. They prefer the togetherness as they only used to watch television all the time.

[Keswick]

Thanks, Strix, for correcting my mistakes. Seems like my brains was half-asleep when I checked the text. Cheers!