Entscheidung für einen Bewerber ist die Email ok ?

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Stefan84
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Entscheidung für einen Bewerber ist die Email ok ?

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Sales Manager, Central and Eastern Europe

Dear ***,

We recently interviewed three candidates for this position.
We have decided to appoint ***.
I will briefly describe the candidate's strengths and explain the reasons for our decision our first candidate was *** her strengths was that he have the best sales results of her team and a very strong personality her
weaknesses was that she was sometimes appeared and aggressive during the interview and don't visit the university.

The second candidate was *** her strengths was that he speaks fluent German, English and Polish and
have a University degree her weaknesses are that her sales results have only been satisfactory and didn't have many
ideas about the future of the company.

Our last candidate was *** his strengths are that he have a University degree and work as Regional
Manager for the south of Poland so he have experience in high positions and he speaks fluent Polish and English the
only weaknesses he have is that he is not creative but that’s ok because he is happy to get ideas from the creative
members of a team.

This strengths and weaknesses of our candidates was the reason why we choose *** we think he have the best
qualification for this position.


Kann ich das so schreiben denke mal das da einige Satzstellungsfehler drin sind oder ? :(

Danke für eure Hilfe im voraus.




Keswick
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Re: Entscheidung für einen Bewerber ist die Email ok ?

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Stefan84 hat geschrieben:Sales Manager, Central and Eastern Europe

Dear ***,

We recently interviewed three candidates for this position.
We have decided to appoint ***.
I will briefly describe the candidate's strengths and explain the reasons for our decision. Our first candidate was ***, her strengths was that she has the best sales results of her team and a very strong personality. Her weaknesses were that she was sometimes appeared (wie trat sie auf, hier fehlt ein Wort) and aggressive during the interview and furthermore she didn't attend university.

The second candidate was ***. Her strengths were that she speaks fluent German, English and Polish. And she has a university degree. Her weaknesses are that her sales results have only been satisfactory and she didn't have many ideas about the future of the company.

Our last candidate was ***. His strengths are that he has a university degree and he has worked as a Regional
Manager for the south of Poland so he has experience in high positions and he speaks fluent Polish and English. The
only weaknesses he has are that he is not creative but that is okay (Ich wuerde hier ein anderes Wort waehlen)because he is happy to get ideas from the creative members of a team.

This strengths and weaknesses of our candidates were the reason why we choose *** we think he has the best qualification for this position.
Deine Saetze sind zu lang und buchstaeblich ohne Punkt und Komma. Schreibe lieber kuerzere Saetze. Achte darauf, dass du keine wichtigen Woerter oder Satzteile vergisst. Und sie dir die Deklination von "to have" nochmal an.
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