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ich habe einen CV geschrieben. Kann vielleicht jemand drüber schauen, was man verbessern kann?
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Curriculum Vitae

Personal information

Surname(s) / First name(s)
Address 35
D(Germany)
Telephone(s) +49 ()
Fax(es) +49 ()
E-mail(s)
Nationality German
Date of birth
Gender Male

Desired employment / Commercial Agent
Occupational field

Work experience

Dates 04/2008 - present
Occupation or position held Sole proprietor
Main activities and owner and manager, Import of software products from the USA
responsibilities and Britain to Germany, develope a network of potential
customers
Name and address of employer Software GmbH
(Germany)
Type of business or sector Software marketing

Dates 04/2008
Occupation or position held Founding of Software GmbH (limited company) in
Oberhausen

Dates 02/2008
Occupation or position held Return to Germany to set up my own company to market
software products

Dates 09/2006 - 02/2008
Occupation or position held Category Junior Manager
Main activities and learn about software marketing
responsibilities expand Schöller's British market share by 4 %
Name and address of employer Software ---
---Cornwall (Great Britain)
Type of business or sector Administrative And Support Service Activities

Dates 10/2004 - 10/2005
Occupation or position held Internship in the IT section
Name and address of employer --- AG
----(Germany)
Type of business or sector Education

Education and training

Dates 10/2000 - 10/2004
Title of qualification awarded Diploma of Information Technology
Principal subjects / systems analysis, programming, computer organisation,
occupational skills covered data management, OO systems development, computer
communications, professional practice and systems principles.

Name and type of organisation Heinrich-Heine University
providing education and training Universitätsstr. 1, 40225 Düsseldorf (Germany)

Level in national or international classification ISCED 5

Dates 07/1999 - 10/2000
Title of qualification awarded Military Service

Dates 09/1990 - 06/1999
Title of qualification awarded Abitur (German university entrance qualification)
Principal subjects / A-Level Grade B
occupational skills covered
Name and type of organisation Karl-Heinz-Gymnasium (Middle and High school)
providing education and training Oberhausen (Germany)

Level in national or international classification ISCED 3

Personal skills and competences

Mother tongue(s) German

Other language(s)
Self-assessment Understanding Speaking W r i t i n g
European level (*) Listening Reading Spoken interaction Spoken production
English B2 Independent user
French C1 Proficient user
(*) Common European Framework of Reference (CEF) level


Social skills and competences voluntary work for a charity group (Caritas),
soccer

Organisational skills and managing a company with 6 employees for 3 years
competences
Technical skills and photography
competences
Computer skills and 10 years study and experience of computer software and hardware
competences
Driving licence(s) B

Additional information If you need any information about my references, don't hesitate to contact me.
I will give you the names and adresses.