Schönen tag erstmal!
Ich hab einen Text geschrieben und war mit der Zeitform nicht zufrieden (simple present). Habs in simple past umgewandelt und wollte fragen ob der text so (zeitlich und grammatisch) richtig ist!?
A Day Without Electronic
At the morning i got up and went to the funtain to take some water. With this water I washed my face and my hair. After that my famely and I ate bread with some marmalade because we hadn’t a freeze or something like that for sausages. To drank we had only water. At the midday I walked to my friend and hoped he is at home. If I had had a mobilephone, I would have called him.
After a while I was comming without my friend home and my mother saw me. Se said that I was verly unlucky that day.
In the evening we made a fire for a barbeque.
Three houers later i lay in my cold(ly?) bed an knew how lost we would be without electric.
Vielen dank schonmal für hilfreiche kommentare
wäre auch dankbar wenn ihr mir sagen würdet ob ich inhaltlich was falsch gemacht hab. =)
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A Day Without Electronic
In morning i got up and went to the fountain to get some water. With this water I washed my face my hair. After that my family and I ate some bread with marmelade because we did'nt have a (fridge, Refrigerator, freezer) or something like that for sausages. We only had water to drink. At midday I walked over to my friend and hoped he is at home. If I had had a mobile phone, I would have called him.
After a while I was coming home without my friend and my mother saw me. Se said that I was verly unlucky that day.
In the evening we made a fire for a barbeque.
Three hours later i laid down on my cold bed an knew how lost we would be without electricity. (hehe, reimt sich)
In morning i got up and went to the fountain to get some water. With this water I washed my face my hair. After that my family and I ate some bread with marmelade because we did'nt have a (fridge, Refrigerator, freezer) or something like that for sausages. We only had water to drink. At midday I walked over to my friend and hoped he is at home. If I had had a mobile phone, I would have called him.
After a while I was coming home without my friend and my mother saw me. Se said that I was verly unlucky that day.
In the evening we made a fire for a barbeque.
Three hours later i laid down on my cold bed an knew how lost we would be without electricity. (hehe, reimt sich)
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gerne =)
Das had steht hier für die zeitform simple past, wie su sagst. Dieses to drink steht für *zu trinken*.
Also : *Wir hatten nur Wasser zum trinken* . Wir sagen ja in deutsch auch nicht : * Wir hatten nur Wasser zum tranken*
Anders ist es, wenn du sagst : *We only drank water (oder : We drank water only). *
Hoff du verstehst was ich mein. Meine Schulzeit liegt schon so lange zurück, ich weiss nichmehr wie man das nun fachlich alles nennt.
Das only könnte auch so stehen : We had only water to drink, We had water only to drink oder We had water to drink, only.
Geschichten schreibt man generell im simple past, wie in normalen Büchern. Berichte wie zb nen Bericht über ne Studienarbeit etc schreibt man normal im simple present.
Das had steht hier für die zeitform simple past, wie su sagst. Dieses to drink steht für *zu trinken*.
Also : *Wir hatten nur Wasser zum trinken* . Wir sagen ja in deutsch auch nicht : * Wir hatten nur Wasser zum tranken*
Anders ist es, wenn du sagst : *We only drank water (oder : We drank water only). *
Hoff du verstehst was ich mein. Meine Schulzeit liegt schon so lange zurück, ich weiss nichmehr wie man das nun fachlich alles nennt.
Das only könnte auch so stehen : We had only water to drink, We had water only to drink oder We had water to drink, only.
Geschichten schreibt man generell im simple past, wie in normalen Büchern. Berichte wie zb nen Bericht über ne Studienarbeit etc schreibt man normal im simple present.
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