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Oklahoma - Hilfe bei meinem Referat

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Guten Tag,

Ich versuche ein Oklahoma Referat zu schreiben, aber da mein Englisch schlecht ist, schaffe ich das nicht alleine. Es wäre sehr nett wenn mich jemand unterstützen würde. Im Referat ist britisches und amerikanisches Englisch erlaubt. Falls etwas unerklärlich geschrieben ist, dann fragt bitte nach.

So habe ich mir die Einleitung vorgestellt:

Oklahoma is a state located in the South Central region of the United States of America. It borders on the north of Colorado and Kansas, on the east of Missouri and Arkansas, on the south and the west of Texas and on the west of New Mexico. The name Oklahoma comes from the two Choctaw Indian words: “okla” which means "people" and "humma" which means "red”, so the state's name literally means "red people". It is also known by its nickname “Sonner State” because many settlers had already staked their land claims before the land was officially opened for settlement. In 1907, Oklahoma became the 46th state in the Union. The capitol and largest city of Oklahoma is Oklahoma City. Nearly 65 percent of the approx. 3.500.000 Oklahomans live in the metropolitan areas of Oklahoma City and the secondly largest city Tulsa.

(Als Gegenleistung kann ich aber nur ein "Danke Sehr!!!" geben)

Hoffe es kann mir jemand schnell helfen. Ich habe zwar noch Zeit, aber vielleicht dauert das Referat ein bisschen länger ...

PS: Wenn ich das in ein falsches Forum geschrieben habe, bitte ich einen Moderator den Beitrag zu verschieben.

Den Hauptteil und Schluss schreibe ich noch : )




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Das liest sich doch schonmal gar nicht so schlecht.

Wie wäre es, wenn du die weiteren Teile schreibst und sie dann zur Korrektur hier hereinstellt?

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Kein Problem, ich schreibe ja schon die ganze Zeit den Haupteil. Ich wollte nur frühzeitig nachfragen, weil ich weis, dass so etwas Zeit und Geduld der Supporter beansprucht und man nicht gleich ein ganzes Referat korigieren kann und somit Tage vergehen, ohne dass ich was verbessern kann.

Und danke für die Rückmeldung :) , der Anfang war meiner Meinung nach auch nicht so schwer ...

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Na dann warten wir mal auf weitere Häppchen =)

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Einleitung:

Oklahoma is a state located in the South Central region of the United States of America. It borders on the north of Colorado and Kansas, on the east of Missouri and Arkansas, on the south and the west of Texas and on the west of New Mexico. The name Oklahoma comes from the two Choctaw Indian words: “okla” which means "people" and "humma" which means "red”, so the state's name literally means "red people". It is also known by its nickname “Sonner State” because many settlers had already staked their land claims before the land was officially opened for settlement. In 1907, Oklahoma became the 46th state in the Union. The capitol and largest city of Oklahoma is Oklahoma City. Nearly 65 percent of the approx. 3.500.000 Oklahomans live in the metropolitan areas of Oklahoma City and the secondly largest city Tulsa.

Haupteil (Erster Teil):
History of Oklahoma:

Oklahoma has a large history. It was discovered in 1541 by Francisco Vásquez de Coronado who traveled through the state on his quest for the "Lost City of Gold". But the area was claimed by French explorers in the 1700s. Because the country was not to be used at the time, nobody settled in Oklahoma. The people preferred the states Florida, Alabama, Georgia, and Tennessee. Therefore beginning in the 1820s they transported 50.000 Indian peoples of five tribes to Oklahoma which resulted in the deaths of approx. 4,000 Cherokees. This dislocation is called today "Trail of Tears". In the Cherokee language, the event is called “Nunna daul Isunyi” (“The Trail Where We Cried"). A monument at the New Echota (in Georgia) honors the Cherokees who died on the Trail of Tears. The survivors eventually recovered from the dislocation and with their new institutions and cultural adaptations a period of rapid developments called the "Golden Age" of Indian Territory began. Between 1866 and 1889 in the era of the cowboy, ranches were built near by Oklahoma or settled illegally in Indian Territory. In 1889, Congress opened up 2 million acres for white settlement (it was previously open only to Native Americans who were forced to leave their homelands), and the first of a number of land runs began. The opening of the Indian lands in Oklahoma Territory was of great interest to people across the United States. Usually, land was allocated to settlers on a first come. They broke the rules by crossing the border into the territory before it was allowed to settle. Those settlers were called “Sooners” because they have been crossing the border sooner which eventually became the state's official nickname (“The Sooner State”). On November 16th, 1907, Oklahoma became the 46th state. In 1928, the discoveries of oil pools have helped Oklahoma to grow rapidly in population and make it to a rich state. Tulsa eventually became known as the "Oil Capital of the World" for most of the 20th century. The businessman Cyrus Avery, began the Campain in 1927 to create the “Route 66". The planning of Route 66 were based in his hometown Tulsa. During the 1930s, the “Dust Bows”, which was a series of dust storms causing major ecological and agricultural damage to American, sending thousands of farmers of areas of Kansas, Texas, New Mexico, and Oklahoma into poverty. The “Dust Bows” just ended in 1950. Many reservoirs and man-made lakes were build and by the 1960s 200 man-made lakes had been created, the most in the nation.

Als nächstes habe ich mir gedacht, dass ich einen weiteren "Unterpunkt" mit dem Namen "Fakten, Daten und Rekorde" mache. Wird das im englischen so gesagt: "Facts, data and records", weil ich bin mir bei "data" nicht so sicher, ob das so übersetzt wird.

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Oklahoma has a large history. It was discovered in 1541 by Francisco Vásquez de Coronado who traveled through the state on his quest for the "Lost City of Gold". But (why "but"?) the area was claimed by French explorers in the 1700s. Because the country was not to be used (you don't "use" a country) at thethat time, nobody settled in Oklahoma.

The people preferred the states like Florida, Alabama, Georgia, and or Tennessee. Therefore, beginning in the 1820s, they (who?) transported 50.000 Indian peoples of five tribes to Oklahoma which resulted in the deaths of approx. 4,000 Cherokees (how?).

This dislocation (resettlement) is called known today as the "Trail of Tears". In the Cherokee language, the event is called “Nunna daul Isunyi” (“The Trail Where We Cried"). A monument at the New Echota (what is a "new echota?) (in Georgia) honors the Cherokees who died on the Trail of Tears.

The survivors eventually recovered from the dislocation, and with their new institutions and cultural adaptations a period of rapid developments - called the "Golden Age" of Indian Territory - began.

Between 1866 and 1889, in the era of the cowboys, ranches were built near by Oklahoma or settlers settled illegally in Indian Territory. In 1889, Congress opened up 2 million acres for white settlement (it was previously open only to Native Americans who were forced to leave their homelands), and the first of a number of land runs began.
The opening of the Indian lands in Oklahoma Territory was of great interest to people across the United States. Usually, land was allocated to settlers on a first come. They broke the rules by crossing the border into the territory before it was allowed to be settled.

Those settlers were called “Sooners” because they have been were crossing the border sooner - and also the reason for which eventually became the state's official nickname (“The Sooner State”). On November 16th 1907, Oklahoma became the 46th state of the US. In 1928, the discoveries of oil pools have helped Oklahoma to grow rapidly in population and make it to a rich state.

Tulsa from that time on was eventually became known as the "Oil Capital of the World" for the most of the 20th century. In 1927 the businessman Cyrus Avery, began the campain in 1927 to create the “Route 66". The planning (Das Büro? Die Entwicklung des Plans?) of Route 66 were (/was - je nachdem) based in his hometown Tulsa. During the 1930s, the “Dust Bows”, which was a series of dust storms causing major ecological and agricultural damage to American, sent ding thousands of farmers of in areas of Kansas, Texas, New Mexico, and Oklahoma into poverty. The “Dust Bows” just ended in 1950. Many reservoirs and man-made lakes were build and by during/in the 1960s, 200 man-made lakes had been created - the most more than anywhere else nationwide.

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Thank you very much. Danke sehr. Habe meinen Text weitergeschrieben und einige Fehler und Erklärungen grün ergänzt.

Oklahoma – „The Sooner State“

Oklahoma is a state located in the South Central region of the United States of America. It borders on the north of Colorado and Kansas, on the east of Missouri and Arkansas, on the south and the west of Texas and on the west of New Mexico. The name Oklahoma comes from the two Choctaw Indian words: “okla” which means "people" and "humma" which means "red”, so the state's name literally means "red people". It is also known by its nickname “The Sonner State” because many settlers had already staked their land claims before the land was officially opened for settlement. In 1907, Oklahoma became the 46th state in the Union. The capitol and largest city of Oklahoma is Oklahoma City. Nearly 65 percent of the approx. 3.500.000 Oklahomans live in the metropolitan areas of Oklahoma City and the secondly largest city Tulsa.


History of Oklahoma:

Oklahoma has a large history. It was discovered in 1541 by Francisco Vásquez de Coronado who traveled through the state on his quest for the "Lost City of Gold". The area was claimed by French explorers in the 1700s. Because the country was not to be used (Soll bedeuten, dass es nicht zu gebrauchen war) at that time, nobody settled in Oklahoma. The people preferred states like Florida, Alabama or Georgia, and Tennessee. Therefore, beginning in the 1820s, the amaricans who don’t like mixing of races and who wanted the land for themselves transported 50.000 Indian peoples of five tribes to Oklahoma which resulted in the deaths of approx. 4,000 to 8000 Cherokees, due to (<< Aufgrund) unsatisfactory nutrition (<< Ernährung) and equipment. This resettlement is known today as the "Trail of Tears". In the Cherokee language, the event is called “Nunna daul Isunyi” (“The Trail Where We Cried"). A monument at the New Echota State Park in Georgia honors the Cherokees who died on the Trail of Tears. The survivors eventually recovered from the resettlement, and with their new institutions and cultural adaptations a period of rapid developments called the "Golden Age" of Indian Territory - began. Between 1866 and 1889, in the era of the cowboys, ranches were built near by Oklahoma or settlers settled illegally in Indian Territory. In 1889, Congress opened up 2 million acres for white settlement (it was previously open only to Native Americans who were forced to leave their homelands), and the first of a number of land runs began. The opening of the Indian lands in Oklahoma Territory was of great interest to people across the United States. Usually, land was allocated to settlers on a first come. They broke the rules by crossing the border into the territory before it was allowed to be settled. Those settlers were called “Sooners” because they were crossing the border sooner - and also the reason for the state's official nickname (“The Sooner State”). On November 16th, 1907, Oklahoma became the 46th state of the US. In 1928, the discoveries of oil pools have helped Oklahoma to grow rapidly in population and make it to a rich state. Tulsa from that time on was known as the "Oil Capital of the World" for the most of the 20th century. In 1927 the businessman Cyrus Avery began the campain to create the “Route 66". The oversee of the planning of Route 66 was based in his hometown Tulsa. During the 1930s, the “Dust Bows”, which was a series of dust storms causing major ecological and agricultural damage to America, sent thousands of farmers in areas of Kansas, Texas, New Mexico, and Oklahoma into poverty. The “Dust Bows” ended in 1950. Many reservoirs and man-made lakes were build and during the 1960s 200 man-made lakes had been created - more than anywhere else nationwide. 1995 terrorists blow up a bomb in front of the Alfred P. Murrah Federal Building, a U.S. government office complex in downtown of Oklahoma City. It was until the September 11th attacks the deadliest act of terrorism on U.S. 168 people died and over 800 people injured.

Facts, data and records:

In Oklahoma many famous peoples were born or lived and live there:

- Will Rogers, actor (1889 to 1935):
Rogers was beloved by the American people and was the top-paid movie star in Hollywood.
- Tommy Franks, United States General (born 1945)
- Brad Pitt, actor (born 1963):
Brad Pitt became famous during the mid 1990s.
- James Garner, actor (born 1928)
- Ron Howard, actor/director (born 1954)
- Vera Miles, actress (born 1929)
- Chuck Norris, actor (born 1940):
- Jeanne Tripplehorn, actress (born 1963)
- James Marsden, actor (born 1973)
- Troy Aikman, NFL star (born 1966)
- Johnny Bench, baseball legend (born 1947)
- Bill Goldberg, professional wrestler (born 1966)
- Mickey Mantle, baseball legend (1931 to 1955)
- Tommy Morrison, boxer (born 1969)

Oklahoma has more Indians than any other state of the U.S. and the most of they are headquartered in Oklahoma, too. (Hier würde ich gerne einen Zusammenhang einbauen, aber mir fällt kein Wort ein, welches die Sätze verbindet.) The Flag of Oklahoma consists of a traditional buffalo-skin with seven eagle feathers, a peace pipe, a olive branch which representing the whites and a sky blue background.

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The Seal of Oklahoma consists of a five-pointed star in a circle. The center of the star contains the Seal of the Territory of Oklahoma and the five rays of the star hold the seals of the Five Civilized Tribes (Cherokee, Chickasaw, Choctaw, Creek, and Seminole). The small stars around the big star, representing the other 45 states of the U.S.

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Oklahoma isn’t only admits because of the Indians. It is the state of the cowboys, too. The National Cowboy Hall of Fame is located in Oklahoma City. And Oklahoma has the biggest cattle auction and meat processing house (Soll bedeuten: “Viehauktions- und Fleischverarbeitungshaus”) called National Stockyards in Stockyard City, Oklahoma.

Bei diesen Satz wusste ich nicht, wie ich das schreiben soll:

One of the most well-known inventions, which appeared first in Oklahoma, were the shopping cart by Sylvan Goldman, the electric guitar by Bob Dunn and the first ?Parkuhr?.

Einer von den bekanntesten Erfindungen, die in Oklahoma zuerst erschienen, war der Einkaufswagen von Sylvan Goldman, die elektrische Gitarre von Bob Dunn und die erste aufgestellte Parkuhr.

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Oklahoma has a large history. It was discovered in 1541 by Francisco Vásquez de Coronado who traveled through the state on his quest for the "Lost City of Gold". The area was claimed by French explorers in the 1700s. Because the country was not to be used (Soll bedeuten, dass es nicht zu gebrauchen war| Dann probier es doch mal mit "unfruchtbar" - im landwirtschaftlichen Sinne ;)) at that time, nobody settled in Oklahoma.

The people preferred states like Florida, Alabama or Georgia, and Tennessee. Therefore, beginning in the 1820s, the amaricans who don’t like mixing of races and who wanted the land for themselves, transported brought 50.000 Indian peoples of five tribes to Oklahoma. As a result, approx. 4,000 to 8000 Cherokees died which resulted in the death of approx. 4,000 to 8000 Cherokees,due to (<< Aufgrund) unsatisfactory nutrition (<< Ernährung| Schlag mal Unter- bzw Mangelernährung nach) and equipment. This resettlement is known today as the "Trail of Tears". In the Cherokee language, the event is called “Nunna daul Isunyi” (“The Trail Where We Cried"). A monument at the New Echota State Park in Georgia honors the Cherokees who died on the Trail of Tears. The survivors eventually recovered from the resettlement, and with their new institutions and cultural adaptations a period of rapid developments called the "Golden Age" of Indian Territory - began.

Between 1866 and 1889, in the era of the cowboys, ranches were built near by Oklahoma or settlers settled illegally in on Indian Territory. In 1889, the Congress opened up 2 million acres for white settlement (it was previously open only to Native Americans who were forced to leave their homelands), and the first of a number of land-runs began. The opening of the Indian lands in on Oklahoma Territory was of great interest to people across the United States. Usually, land was allocated to settlers on a first come. They broke the rules by crossing the border into the territory before it was allowed to be settled. Those settlers were called “Sooners” because they were crossing the border sooner - and also the reason for the state's official nickname (“The Sooner State”). On November 16th, 1907, Oklahoma became the 46th state of the US.

In 1928, the discoveries of oil pools have helped Oklahoma to grow rapidly in population and make it to a rich state. Tulsa from that time on was known as the "Oil Capital of the World" for the most of the 20th century. In 1927 the businessman Cyrus Avery began the campain to create the “Route 66". The oversee of the planning of Route 66 was based in his hometown Tulsa. During the 1930s, the “Dust Bows”, which was a series of dust storms causing major ecological and agricultural damage to America, sent thousands of farmers in areas of Kansas, Texas, New Mexico, and Oklahoma into poverty. The “Dust Bows” ended in 1950. Many reservoirs and man-made lakes were build and during the 1960s 200 man-made lakes had been created - more than anywhere else nationwide. 1995 terrorists blow up a bomb in front of the Alfred P. Murrah Federal Building, a U.S. government office complex in downtown of Oklahoma City. It was until the September 11th attacks the deadliest act of terrorism on U.S. 168 people died and over 800 people injured. (Satzbau)

Facts, data and records:

In Oklahoma many famous peoples were born or lived and live there (ebenfalls Satzbau, stell es um und es liest sich deutlich flüssiger):

- Will Rogers, actor (1889 to 1935):
Rogers was beloved by the Americans people and was the top-paid movie star in Hollywood.
- Tommy Franks, United States General (born 1945)
- Brad Pitt, actor (born 1963):
Brad Pitt became famous during the mid 1990s.
- James Garner, actor (born 1928)
- Ron Howard, actor/director (born 1954)
- Vera Miles, actress (born 1929)
- Chuck Norris, actor (born 1940):
- Jeanne Tripplehorn, actress (born 1963)
- James Marsden, actor (born 1973)
- Troy Aikman, NFL star (born 1966)
- Johnny Bench, baseball legend (born 1947)
- Bill Goldberg, professional wrestler (born 1966)
- Mickey Mantle, baseball legend (1931 to 1955)
- Tommy Morrison, boxer (born 1969)

Oklahoma has more Indians than any other state of the U.S. and the most of they them are headquartered (Reservate nennt man das glaub ich, wo die leben ;)) in Oklahoma, too. (Hier würde ich gerne einen Zusammenhang einbauen, aber mir fällt kein Wort ein, welches die Sätze verbindet.| Schreib doch, dass die Flagge an die besondere indianische Tradition erinnert) The Flag of Oklahoma consists of shows a traditional buffalo-skin with seven eagle feathers, a peace pipe, a olive branch which representing the whites and a sky blue background.

- Picture -

The Seal of Oklahoma consists of is a five-pointed star in a circle. The center of the star contains the Seal of the Territory of Oklahoma and the five rays of the star hold the seals of the Five Civilized Tribes (Cherokee, Chickasaw, Choctaw, Creek, and Seminole). The small stars around the big star, representing the other 45 states of the U.S.

- Picture -

Oklahoma isn’t only admits (?)because of the Indians. It is the state of the cowboys, too. The National Cowboy Hall of Fame is located in Oklahoma City. And Besides, Oklahoma has the biggest cattle auction and meat processing house largest livestock auction, called National Stockyards in Stockyard City and serves as a primary source for meat processing called National Stockyards in Stockyard City, Oklahoma.

One of the most well best-known inventions, which appeared first in Oklahoma first, were the shopping cart by Sylvan Goldman, the electric guitar by Bob Dunn and the first (first again?) ?Parkuhr? parking meter.

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Zoo hat geschrieben: The opening of the Indian lands in (in und on oder nur on???) [/color] Oklahoma Territory was of great interest to people across the United States.
Natürlich nur on, habs vergessen zu streichen, sorry.

Rogers was beloved by the Americans and was (Warum muss das “was” weg?)
Das muss nicht weg, man kann es auslassen.
(Was ich sagen will: Oklahoma hat die meisten Indianer und die meisten Indianerstämme haben auch Ihren Hauptsitz dort)
Mir ist klar, was du sagen willst. Ich wollte nur anregen, ob es statt "headquartered" vielleicht einen passenderen Ausdruck gibt.
Additionally, Oklahoma has the biggest cattle/ livestock (evtl. besser?) auction and meat processing house called National Stockyards in Stockyard City, Oklahoma.
Ein Muttersprachler sagte livestock, habs also auch nur aus zweiter Hand ;)

by Bob Dunn and the installed parking meter.
Sagt man das so? "installed"?
Als Ende wollte ich eigentlich noch ein Zitat verwenden, das im deutschen etwa so heist: "Es sollte ein Gesetz geben, dass jedem verbietet in die USA einzureisen, bevor er Oklahoma gesehen hat" (von einer berühmten Person)
Meinst du vielleicht
(Oklahoma) Governor E.W. Marland once said:
"Oklahoma can make it without the United States, but the United
States can't make it without Oklahoma."
?

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Das mit dem "on" habe ich schon vermutet, aber man kann ja nie wissen ...

Ich denke schon, dass das "installed" heist.

Und das war nicht das Zitat, aber das ist auch ganz gut :big_thumb:

Danke für die Hilfe.

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Whoops, jetzt habe ich einen ganzen Post von dir gelöscht, tut mir leid :(

Dabei wollte ich nur sagen, dass du hier
Zoo hat geschrieben: has the biggest cattle/livestockauction and meat processing house called National Stockyards in Stockyard City, Oklahoma.
in deiner endgültigen aus dem "largest" wieder "biggest" gemacht.

Sorry!

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