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Text 1 Short Story:
Keeping dreams
Jeffrey Smith wasn’t home yet when Lydia woke up of a dream, at least she aussumed the latter. She had absolutely no idea what she had done just the moment before. She could had read a book, written a letter or even slept she was completely unaware of what she had done the entire afternoon, all she realized was staying herself in the middle of the living room focusing a point on the floor.
As for Lydia had no idea about this situation she just started to sing “New York,New York”.
She had never sang this song before, she never eaven heard about it for being ignorant of
Musicals from the “golden twenties” lasting a century ago. Mrs Smith was a very pride young slim lady even beeing in her seventh month. She called her husband asking him not to come home,.. never again. Though they made a love marriage, Jeffrey “the jerk” as he was once called by his mother, all her compassion and love for her “honey” transformed in this desireful moment to the very opposit. She was obsessed disdaining him from the bottom of her heart. “Jeffrey the jerk” repeating this words uncountable times in her mind she was trembling with hatred and wepping tears of anger. Even if Lydia never came across a person using the alliteration “Jeffrey the jerk” in real, she was in great panic encountering one.
The phone rang. “It’s me Jeffrey. I love you” “-NOOO HOW CAN YOU EVEN SAY THAT..” Jeffrey could hear glasses broken and his wife screaming with immeasurable pain in her voice. Jeffrey entered the living room crying “Baby what is the matter, are you jealous because you’re pregnant? You really should not, I never even glance at other girls.”
These were his last words.. Lydia now remembered. She was bursting Jeffrey’s head with the kitchen clock for more than half an hour, that was it, she was doing before waking up. It was his splitted head she was focusing on the whole time. Not even his mother could now recognize to call him “Jeffrey the Jerk”. Finally at this moment she remembered her dream: She saw Jeffrey’s mother teasing her son “Jeffrey my jerk of course Lydia is not insane.. it was just a nightmare.”
Text2: Pros and Cons
Pros and Cons of Globalizm
Pro Globalizm
Globalizm is (almost) as old as mankind. Within the first cultural trade between two different cultures Globalizm began to shrink the world. It is the most natural progress one can imagine. The world is shrinking further and further and in our century where systems of mass communication have encountered most households we all became citizens of “the global village”. Striving against this inevitable movement is struggling progress. If we want to make the world a better place we have to support globalizm; for it closes the gap between rich and
poor countries.
Contra Globalizm
As Globalizm closes the gap worldwide between rich and poor countries it widenes however in the small-scale the gap within the singular nation.Making the rich of a society richer but also the poor even poorer. In the liberal free market without any government restrictions capital exploits labour all over the world. In order to gain the maximum profit, accumulated capital chooses the cheapest labour worldwide, creating unemployment particularly in developed nations. It is right that the gap between rich and poor countries will be closed, the problem is it closes not on the rich side but on the poor one. Globalists state that developed nations should specialize and let menial jobs done by others, obviously this argument is very short-sighted. Only a minority of a society has the financial and sorry to say intellectual abilities to master a sophisticated university education. In Addition why does one think that low income countries were unable producing high qualified engineers,physicians or even scientists themselves?
This is a complete blunder, in a few years it is very likely that low income countries such as India or China will include the best universities in the world, flooding the market with high qualified professionals working with great passion gratefully for a tiny fraction of the loan of a american or european competitor . As a result you will soon find many local academic professionals in the same sad club with non- and semi-skilled workers. By the way speaking about minorities and majorities our democratic system comes in mind. Our country is ruled by a globalist policy, but who asked us to do so? Definitely the vast majority favors job security and employment rate rather than raising stock shares ; but who cares? One is for sure, no MP’s, as their jobs are secure and (un)fortunately amongst the few which cannot be substituted to any Chinese half the world away.
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Jeffrey Smith wasn’t home yet when Lydia woke up ofawoke from a dream, at least she aussumed the latter(??). She had absolutely no idea what she had done just the moment before. She could had read a book, written a letter or even slept. sShe was completely unaware of what she had done the entire whole afternoon, all she realized was that she was staying herself in the middle of the living room, focusing on a point on the floor.
As forSince Lydia had no idea about this the situation she just started to sing “New York,New York”.
She had never sang this song before, she never eaven heard about it for being ignorant of
Musicals from the “golden twenties” lasting a century ag (??)o.
Mrs Smith was a very pride young, slim lady even if she wasbeeing in her seventh month.
She called her husband, asking him not to come home,..never again. Though they made it was a love marriage, but all her compassion and love for her “honey” - or Jeffrey “the jerk”, as he was once called by his mother,- in this desireful momentturned into to the very opposit in this desireful moment all her compassion and love for her “honey” transformed in this desireful moment to the very opposit. She was obsessed by disdaining him from the bottom of her heart. “Jeffrey the jerk” ... repeating this words uncountable times in her mind she was trembling with hatred and wepping tears of anger.
Even if Lydia nevercame across met a person using the alliteration “Jeffrey the jerk” in real, she was in great panic encountering one.
The phone rang. “It’s me Jeffrey. I love you” “-NOOO HOW CAN YOU EVEN SAY THAT..” Jeffrey could hear glasses broken and his wife screaming with immeasurable pain in her voice. Jeffrey entered the living room crying “Baby what is the matter, are you jealous because you’re pregnant? You really should not, I never even glanced at other girls.”
These were his last words.. Lydia now remembered. Shewas bursting blew upon Jeffrey’s head with the kitchen clock for more than half an hour. That was it, what she was doing before waking up. It was his splitted head she was focusing on the whole time. Not even his mother could now recognize to call him “Jeffrey the Jerk”. Finally at this moment she remembered her dream: She saw Jeffrey’s mother teasing (??) her son “Jeffrey my jerk of course Lydia is not insane.. it was just a nightmare.”
Text2: Pros and Cons
Pros and Cons of Globalizm
ProGlobalizm globalisation
Globalizm is (almost) as old as mankind. Within the first cultural trade between two different cultures Globalizm began to shrink (vom Sinn nicht passend - vllt "growing together"?) the world. It is the most natural progress one can imagine. The world is shrinking further and further and in our century where systems of mass communication have encountered most households and we all become citizens of “the global village”. Striving against this inevitable movement is struggling progress ("resistance is futile" - I guess Bau den Satz um). If we want to make the world a better place we have to support globalizm;for it closes the gap between rich and
poor countries.
Contra Globalizm
As Globalizm closes the gapworldwide between rich and poor countries worldwide it even widenes however in the small-scale the gap within the inside a particular singular nation .
(Making the rich of a society richer but also the poor even poorer).
In the liberal free market without any government restrictions capital exploits labour all over the world (??).
In order to gain the maximum profit, accumulated capital chooses the cheapest labour worldwide, creating unemployment particularly in developed nations. It is right that the gap between rich and poor countries will be closed, the problem is it closes not on the rich side but on the poor one (??).
Globalistsstate mention that developed nations should specialize and let menial jobs be done by others, obviously this argument is very short-sighted.
Only a minority of a society has the financial andsorry to say intellectual abilities to master a sophisticated university education. In Addition, why does one think that low income countries were are unable to educate producing high qualified engineers, physicians or even scientists themselves?
This is a complete blunder, in a few years itis will be very likely that low income countries such as India or China will include have the best universities (in the world), flooding the market with high qualified professionals working with great passion, gratefully for a tiny fraction of the loan of a american or european competitor.
As a result you will soon find many local academic professionals in the same sad club (??)with non- and semi-skilled workers.
By the way, speaking about minorities and majorities, ourdemocratic system comes in mind. Our country is ruled by a globalist policy, but who asked us to do so? Definitely the vast majority favors job security and employment rate rather than raising stock shares ; but who cares?
One is for sure, no MP’s, as their jobs are secure and (un)fortunately amongst the few which cannot be substituted to any Chinese half the world away.
She had never sang this song before, she never e
Musicals from the “golden twenties” lasting a century ag (??)o.
Mrs Smith was a very pride young, slim lady even if she was
She called her husband, asking him not to come home,..
Even if Lydia never
The phone rang. “It’s me Jeffrey. I love you” “-NOOO HOW CAN YOU EVEN SAY THAT..” Jeffrey could hear glasses broken and his wife screaming with immeasurable pain in her voice. Jeffrey entered the living room crying “Baby what is the matter, are you jealous because you’re pregnant? You really should not, I never even glanced at other girls.”
These were his last words.. Lydia now remembered. She
Text2: Pros and Cons
Pros and Cons of Globalizm
Pro
Globalizm is (almost) as old as mankind. Within the first cultural trade between two different cultures Globalizm began to shrink (vom Sinn nicht passend - vllt "growing together"?) the world. It is the most natural progress one can imagine. The world is shrinking further and further and in our century where systems of mass communication have encountered most households and we all become citizens of “the global village”. Striving against this inevitable movement is struggling progress ("resistance is futile" - I guess Bau den Satz um). If we want to make the world a better place we have to support globalizm;
poor countries.
Contra Globalizm
As Globalizm closes the gap
(Making the rich of a society richer but also the poor even poorer).
In the liberal free market without any government restrictions capital exploits labour all over the world (??).
In order to gain the maximum profit, accumulated capital chooses the cheapest labour worldwide, creating unemployment particularly in developed nations. It is right that the gap between rich and poor countries will be closed, the problem is it closes not on the rich side but on the poor one (??).
Globalists
Only a minority of a society has the financial and
This is a complete blunder, in a few years it
As a result you will soon find many local academic professionals in the same sad club (??)with non- and semi-skilled workers.
By the way, speaking about minorities and majorities, our
One is for sure, no MP’s, as their jobs are secure and (un)fortunately amongst the few which cannot be substituted to any Chinese half the world away.
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