IELTS Essay writing.

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IELTS Essay writing.

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Hey,

ich bin der Neue und bin unglaublich froh "euch" gefunden zu haben.

Ich bereite mich aktuell für IETLS vor und es sind nun knapp 6 Jahre her, dass ich einen Essay geschrieben habe.
Ich würde mich sehr freuen, wenn jemand Zeit findet und über meinen Essay schaut und mir eventuell Tipps geben kann.

Mir fällt momentan der Satzbau schwer bei komplexeren Sätzen, bzw. ich bin mir da unsicher, ob ich das so richtig mache oder nicht.Wie ein Satz aufgebaut ist, weiß ich, aber ob ich das auch bei komplexeren Sätzen richtig anwenden kann, weiß ich nicht. :|


As computers are being used more an more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom

In the 21 century, computers play a bigger and bigger role in education. Nowadays every classroom has got a computer thus replace the teacher.

In today's world, the computer became more and more important in our life. They can do million of thing but I totally disagree with the argument that computers can replace the role of a teacher. Furthermore, a teacher adduce youth discipline and manners.

At the present day, we use computers in every situation. To give an example; we use it in school for a research on a topic. Earlier people have to go to the library and read several for books for a research on a topic. In fact, students can save a lot of time for a research. Therefore it is helpful to contribute a computer in every classroom.

Indeed, the computer has no feelings and is not smart enough to adduce students discipline and manners. Teachers has an important impact on youth. Accordingly, teachers teach students manners for their future life. Moreover, students need somebody to talk or discuss. As an example, when a student does not agree with the answer the computer gave, he wants to discuss this answer with the teacher or maybe he has got some issues in life and wants to talk to someone expect the parents.

In conclusion, the computer has a lot of benefits but in my opinion, it will never replace the role of a teacher. Moreover, I think they should never try to replace the role of a teacher. In fact, they can not feel like a teacher also every student is an individual an has to handle like one.




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