Korrektur meiner composition

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Korrektur meiner composition

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Hallo, ich schreibe in den nächsten Woche eine Materialgestüzte compistion. Da ich bezüglich Grammatik nicht so der beste bin möchte ich es mal des öfteren üben. Daher bitte ich den folgenden Aufsatz mal auf Gramtikalische Fehler zu überprüfen.Natürlich würde ich lieber meine Lehrerin fragen, aber es ist Ferienzeit und die Dame aktzeptiert leider keine Texte über email's.

Overpopulation is a huge and serios problem in the new modern world. Population of the world is rising at the moment. Three childs are born every three seconds. This newstime sounds great, but some researcher think that overpopulation gets out of control. Nowadays we have so much people who have no food and no water. What we are do, when population doublicates or triples? For my composition I will use materials 1,2, and 4.

Firstly, we should know how fast the population rises. Material 1 shows us that the population was 2,5 billions in 1950. The population is growing fast. Researcher think the population will triple until 2020 and rise to 8,7 billions until 2050. This is a huge problem, because all these people need place, food and water. Nowadays we live with 7 billions people on the earth and we have lots of people who have no food and no water. How we solve the problem with 8,5 billions people, when we hadn’t solved it with 6 billions people in 2000 or 2010? More and More people must divide same amount of food. (material 1,4)

Secondly, one of the biggest reason for overpopulation are a bad school education by womens. If  a women has good school education, she will born fewer childs than a women with a bad school education. We can also see it in Tansania. A women without a school education becomes  six children, but a women with school education only becomes 2 children. The result is that education is a very important factor for overpopulation.

Overpopulation also have more problems. More and more people are borning at the moment. It‘s same like shares. If more and more shares are in circulation, the value will fall. The same applieses to the individual. The hole world should do something like China. The politic have strict laws for population in China. A family are not allowed to get more then 2 children. If somebody get more children, they will get a huge punishment.

In my opinion politics should do more to get the control about overpopulation. They should support womens who have a bad school education. But also schools should teach the pupils about the problem with overpopulation. Every single person can do something. Family’s should think about how much children they really need.




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