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annagabsschon
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Korrektur von einem Comment

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Hallihallo!
Ich bin gerade auf das Forum gestoßen, da ich jemand gesucht habe, der mal über meinen Englisch Comment drüberlesen könnte. Ich schreibe bald eine Schulaufgabe darüber und bin nicht besonders gut in Englisch, deswegen hoff ich das ihr mir helfen könnt! :lol:

Das Thema ist wearing school


A lot of people wear uniforms. So it is easier to identify a group of workers. For example the police, firemans, some companies and sometimes pupils, too. In this context it is often discussed if it is usefull or useless. Let's have a look at the advantages and disadvantages.

On the one hand school uniforms could reduce bullying, because a lot of children are harassed for the clothes if they don't wear brand-name clothes. For example every child in the class has the latest style, but one family don't have the money for it and maybe this child would be expelled of the community.

But one the other hand school uniforms are very expensive, because the children mustn't only buy normal clothes but rather need to buy the school uniform, too. And it could be difficult for poor families to finance it.

Furthermore the children aren't allowed to develob theirselves. A lot of children, especally youth, express theirselves in the clothes and if they wear uniforms, this will be not possible and they can develop their style and character complete.

Weighing the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion it is not usefull to get school uniforms. There is no doubt about the fact that school uniform could reduce harassing, but only could and for the cons predominate.

Danke schon mal im Voraus und wenn ihr irgendwelche Tipps habt, wie ich mein Schriftenglisch verbessern kann, immer her damit. :wink:

Schönen Abend noch




annagabsschon
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Re: Korrektur von einem Comment

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wearing school uniform * endschuldigung, es hat iwie das wort verschluckt :lol: :roll:

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annagabsschon hat geschrieben:A lot of people have to wear uniforms.
So it is easy to identify workers of certain vocations.
For example police officers, firefighters, soldiers, various companies and sometimes pupils, too.
In this context the pros and cons are often discussed.

Let us have a look at the advantages and disadvantages.
On the one hand school uniforms may reduce bullying, because a lot of children are harassed for not wearing modern branded clothes.
For example, the children from families that cannot afford (or do not feel the need) to spend money on stylish closes are often teased.
They are also vulnerable to exclusion from leisure activities of their classmates.


One the other hand school uniforms are often a very expensive option, because the parents would have to buy the school uniform in addition to normal clothes.
Therefore, it would put further financial strain on the poor families.

Furthermore, the children are not enabled to develop their style and character completely, if they have to wear uniforms.
A lot of children, especially the older ones, enjoy expressing themselves through their clothes.
So they would not bea able to fully explore this part of their identity at school.

Weighing the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion that it is not usefull to prescribe school uniforms.
Although there is a high probability that school uniforms would reduce harassing, this is only by chance - so the cons are predominant.
See also

http://www.pbs.org/newshour/extra/1999/ ... -uniforms/

http://www.davidsonacademy.com/blog/bid ... l-Uniforms

http://www.studymode.com/essays/Advanta ... 51106.html

http://www.education.com/magazine/artic ... _Uniforms/

https://duckduckgo.com/?q="wearing+school+uniform"
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annagabsschon
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Re: Korrektur von einem Comment

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VielenVielen DAnk du hast mir sehr geholfen !!

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