Briefkorrektur

[thepool]

Hallo,

ich muss in Englisch einen Brief an eine Organiation verfassen, der ich mich kurz vorstelle und mitteile das ich für sie arbeiten möchte.
Kann mir vlt jemand meinen Brief auf Satzbau, Zeitform, Rechtschreibung korrigieren?

Danke vorab.

Hier der Mittelteil des Briefes:

DearSir or Madam,

Before some months a friend of mine told me from the THW and what they do. I think the THW is a very important voluntary organisation. They help people in Germany and other countries after natural disasters.
I want to help this organisation with my voluntary work, because I think everybody needs help after a natural disaster or an accident. Also it can hit everybody.
I´m twenty-three years old and live with my girlfriend in a small house near Freiberg. My hobbies are playing football, bicycling and working with my hands. After comprehensive school I made an apprenticeship to an electrician and ten years later I finished the master.
Because I love to work with technical devices I want to work for the THW.
I´m a specialist for electronic devices and generally technical gifted. Also I have a truck driver´s licence.
I hope you are interested on my application and I look forward to hearing from you soon.


Yours faithfully.

[thepool]

Ich sehe gerade dass die Kategorie nicht gerade so optimal gewählt ist... sorry dafür!

[Keswick]

Hallo,

ich muss in Englisch einen Brief an eine Organiation verfassen, der ich mich kurz vorstelle und mitteile das ich für sie arbeiten möchte.
Kann mir vlt jemand meinen Brief auf Satzbau, Zeitform, Rechtschreibung korrigieren?

Danke vorab.

Hier der Mittelteil des Briefes:

DearSir or Madam,

A few months ago a friend of mine told me aboutthe THW and what they do. I think the THW is a very important voluntary organisation. They help people in Germany and other countries after natural disasters.
I want to help this organisation with my voluntary work, because I think everybody needs help after a natural disaster or an accident. Also it can hit everybody.
I´m twenty-three years old and live with my girlfriend in a small house near Freiberg. My hobbies are playing football, cyclingand working with my hands (meinst du hier einfach nur DIY ?). After comprehensive school I didan apprenticeship asan electrician and ten years later I finished the master. (du meinst du hast eine Ausbildung abgeschlossen?)
Because I love working with technical devices I want to work for the THW.
I´m a specialist for electronic devices and generally technicallygifted. Also I have a truck driver´s licence.
I hope you are interested on my application and I look forward to hearing from you soon.


Yours faithfully.

[thepool]

Danke für die schnelle Hilfe!

1. blau: ich meine Arbeiten mit den Händen, Handwerkern...
2. blau: ich will sagen: ... zehn Jahre später machte ich den Meister.

[Keswick]

Zu 1: hier wuerde ich schreiben: I enjoy DIY and general handiwork
Zu 2: hier wuerde ich schreiben: tens years later I finished my degree as a fully educated electrician

Nur damit es etwas klarer wird

[thepool]

Danke!!!
Und Glückwunsch zum 3000ten Beitrag! =)