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Alles zu den englischen Zeiten im Aktiv und Passiv.
Questions on tenses (Active and Passive).
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Text überprüfung bitte

Beitrag von creativetense »

Hallo, es wäre sehr nett wenn jeman mal über meinen text schaut und Fehler anstreicht.

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This add shows a new product from the popular company called "SAMSUNG" who produce Handy and features for it.In the back you can see a pink colth.It act very dreamy to me. In the front of this add is shown the new Product calles "SAMSUN SGH-E330. Above it is an well tended hand who stroke or touch the handy. I think it is an hand from an woman. Over the hand is written ,, Neid Grantiert". In my opinion that means, if everyone see this wonderullf new Handyon your own , they want also the same one.The foot from this add personate the product again but it is an other perspective and its smaller than the main Picture. The advertising Slogan,,Neid Garantiert." is written in a italic and discret font. The target-group can be from 14 - upwards

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Handy? Isn't that Denglisch?

suggestions: mobile phone, cell phone