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Kann mir bitte jemand meine Summary korrigieren?

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Ich habe eine Summary geschrieben, weil ich in zwei Tagen eine Englischklausur schreibe. Kann mir bitte jemand meine Summary korrigieren und mir Tipps geben, wie ich mich verbessern könnte?
Hier ist der ursprüngliche Text, den ich zusammenfassen soll:

Indonesia has embarked on a grand scheme to plant 79 million trees in an attempt to boost its green credentials. President Susilo Bambang Yudhoyono, who was photographed this week planting saplings with government ministers, declared that "illegal logging is our biggest enemy" and added: "We will show Indonesia's strong commitment and action to preserve the environment and save our planet." Environmentalists, however, were unimpressed. In recent years, Indonesia has been destroying its forests at a faster rate than any other country. As a consequence, it has the dubious distinction of being the world's third-biggest producer of greenhouse gases, behind the US and China. As for its commitment to cracking down on illegal logging, which is a massive problem in Indonesia, one of the nation's most notorious timber barons, Adelin Lis, recently walked free from court.According to some estimates, Indonesia loses an area of forest the size of Switzerland every year, or the equivalent of a football pitch every 10 seconds. Much of it is cleared to make way for lucrative palm oil plantations. Forest fires, land clearing and the degradation of carbon-rich peatlands are blamed for the country's alarming volume of greenhouse gas emissions. Indonesia, which has 10 per cent of the world's remaining tropical rainforests, has called on rich nations to give it financial assistance to preserve them. Globally, deforestation is said to contribute one fifth of all CO2 emissions more than the world's cars, trucks, trains and aircraft combined.




Meine Summary von diesem Text:


The article „Indonesia Plants 79 Million Trees“, written by Kathy Marks, provides that Indonesia plans to plant 79 million trees to increase it's references.

President Susilo Bambang Yudhoyono explained that „illegal logging“ is the biggest enemy of Indonesia. He says also that he will show Indonesia's strong commitment and action to preserve the environment and save the planet. The country has been destroyed its forests faster than other countries. Moreover, the country is the world's third-biggest producer of greenhouse gases, behind the United States of America and China. One of the nation's most infamous timber barons, Adelin Lis, has walked free from judgement. Indonesia loses an area of forest the size of Switzerland every year. Much of it makes way fpr palm oil plantations. Forest fires, land clearing and the degradation of carbon-rich peatlands are responsible for the many greenhouse gas emissions.
The country has 10 per cent of the world's remaining tropical rainforests. Indonesia is also interested in a carbon trading scheme.




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