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kingruap
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Ist das so richtig?

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Hallo,
vielleicht könntet ihr diesen "opinion essay" schnell korrekturlesen und mir die Fehler ausbesseren und bekanntgeben?
vielen Dank.

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Addicted to the PC-screen?


Being a „webaholic“ is an increasing problem today. People run away from the reality and escape from reality in PC games or on other platforms. In the internet is so much out there and the people got more and more addicted to these things. This can cause physical, menthal and health problems.


In this fictive Internet world the people can choose who they want to be. In this way, they spent hours in discussion forums, chat rooms or online games and forgot about the friends and their family. Moreover, the internet addict can cause serious problems, for example migraine or other eye problems.


Also, accruals and deferrals from the dining table are problems for these people. Webaholics change their eating habits from the dining table to the PC desk. They never choose a healthy meal or just skip the normal eating times. This maybe can cause obeseness or anorexia.


In contrast I have to say that the Internet help the people with finding informations or to stay in social contact with other friends on social networks. But it's a gravely problem when people are obsessed from visiting the internet.
Internet addiction is an addiction like smoking or alcoholism and it is possible that you risk your life with physically and (or) psychologically health problems.
The internet has definitely the power to destroy and manipulate a life.




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