Mir wurde dieses Board empfohlen um nach Hilfe für die Korrektur meines Songtextes zu fragen.
Es handelt sich um einen Metal song und ich bin mir bei einigen stellen nicht ganz so sicher ob es
von die Grammatik stimmt.
Falls mir jemand helfen könnte wäre mir echt geholfen.
PREORDAINED
[Intro]
No light, no glory – imprisoned in a filthy hole
My feet touch soil and my head touches stone
I watch the dust between glass and light
Where the refraction of life has unblocked a hidden trail
On which we're all preordained to fail
[Chorus]
Those who can’t take it are those who will leave
their self-built prisons, escape a life they’ll never retrieve
I scar myself, was born to recreate this tongue
Was put there to encourage me, myself and everyone!
Say it again and then don’t say it anymore!
Don’t let them know, death is the cancers cure
(Shut up)!
[Verse1]
Just in darkness - just in fear
Since everything has got an end
Life is playing tricks and turns out to be a lie
Still staying in wait, to make me sick
[Chorus]
Those who can’t take it are those who will leave
their self built prisons, escape a life they’ll never retrieve
I feel like ending it all!
Now shut up and go!
Now pull the depression inside!
Now pull the depression inside!
Now pull the depression inside!
And everything gonna be all right!
[Verse2]
Not today nor tomorrow, but I'll get stuck in the dusk
Incapable of making steps neither back or forth
Please give me the last chance to defend what has to be defeated
And take away the last burden of sorrow
[Chorus]
Those who can’t take it are those who will leave
their self-built prisons, escape a life they’ll never retrieve
I scar myself, was born to recreate this tongue
Was put there to encourage me, myself and everyone!
Say it again and then don’t say it anymore!
Don’t let them know, death is the cancers cure
(Shut up)!
[Bridge]
Drag me on the end
Preordained solution
Drag me on the end
Preordained solution
Drag me on the end
Preordained solution
Preordained solution
Preordained solution
Preordained END!
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Mit freundlichen Grüßen Mikee
