Referat Empire State Building

[chris1997]

He,
ich bräuchte eine Überarbeitung meines Referats. Wäre sehr nett, wenn das jemand machen könnte:)
•Design •Construction; Transcription •Opening •Importance •Application •Extras •Engineers , Project Manager & Architects •General to the Empire State Building
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Idea
-till 1897 in construction area from empire state building was the Waldorf-Astoria
-„Empire State Building was derived from empire state ( imperiums staat)
-John Jakob, Al Smith presentted plans for new building (highest in the world) -Hope that after the build there is new businnes centre in this area [ -Architects Shreve, Lamb and Harmon
-Building time 20 months , very fast -Firm Starrett Brothers and Eken built it -62 metres aerial for landing stage for airships
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Design
-Art deco stil (ornamental arts, shaping in every architectures, clothes, cars etz..Movement between 1920 and 1940 in designaction)
-Zoning Resolution für New York City( building regulation specified ( vorgegeben) from the city government, regulates structure plan (flächennutzung) ) fix courts, gardens.
Significant downgrading with the increasing altitude cause of the shadow and appeal(Attraktiviutät) of the building
-frame: Steel
veneer: glass, limestone, granite
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Construction; Transcription
-one veneer ( Fassade) shouldnt be over 37,5 metres
-observation platform in high of 86 metres
-groundplan(Grundriss) must be younger with the altitude(Höhe)
-til the 86 floorconsistent 320 metre block, straight, younger and younger
-Then 16 floors straight tower -102 floor is the roof in high of 381 metres (transmittors) -Then 62 metres aerial -Steelframe (60.000 tonnen) -Rivets construction (Nietenkonstruktion) -Limestone and granite became introduced (wurde eingesetzt) in steel frame -6.379 glasses -370.000 Tonnen schwer
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Opening
1.31.Mai 1931 2.Herbert Hoover President of america 3.Old governer Al Smith 4.Broadcasted in radio all over the land 5.Band on the antrance cutted from the grandchild of al smith 6.In the evening the building waslighted overall
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Generals
443,2 metres Height
Without top 381 metres
Highest floor is on 373 metres hight
-owns 102 floors and 73 elevators
-building costs 650 million$
-architect william lamb
-rooms are used for business
-most popular attraction in Manhatten
-with the 62 metres aerial the empire state building takes the lead of the chrysler building in height
-before the world trade centre were collapsed they were the highest buildings
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Application
•Used for business
•Till 86 floors just business firms
insurance companies, leasing companies, publicity agency, offices, banks
73 elevators with a footage (gesamtlänge) of 11 kilometres
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Extras
•Transceiver (sender-Empfänger) for local Tv- and Radioprogramm and –System
•anchor locker ( Ankermast, Block) for air-ships
•Top is served for Transmitting mast (sendemast) •--------------------------------------------------- Architects
•Shreve, Lamb and Harmon: architect's office, active in new york -> became popular based on the construction of the empire state building . Architects: Richmond Shreve, William F. Lamb und Arthur LoomisHarmon
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William F. Lamb
•Born in November the 21th in 1883, Brooklyn
•Gone in September the 8th in 1952,New York
•Studied on the Williams University, then on the Ecole des Beaux Arts, Paris •Ground architect`s office with the last named architects Richmond Shreve
•Arthur Loomis Harmon --------------------------------------------------------------------------
Engineers & project manager
•Starrett Brothers and Eken

[Delfino]

Hey,
ich bräuchte eine Überarbeitung meines Referats.
Es wäre sehr nett, wenn das jemand machen könnte.

•Design
•Construction; Transcription
•Opening
•Importance
•Application
•Extras
•Engineers, Project Manager & Architects
•General information about the Empire State Building
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Idea
-Empire State Building was constructed in place of the Waldorf-Astoria which was built in 1897
-'Empire State Building' was derived from Empire State ( imperiums staat)
-John Jakob, Al Smith presented plans for a new building (highest in the world)
-Hope that after the construction of the skyscraper a new bushiness centre would emerge in this area [
-Architects Shreve, Lamb and Harmon
-Building time 20 months, very fast
-Firm Starrett Brothers and Eken built it
-62 metres aerial for landing stage of airships
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Design
-Art deco stil (ornamental arts, shaping in every architectures, clothes, cars etc..Movement between 1920 and 1940 in designation)
-Zoning Resolution für New York City( building regulation specified ( vorgegeben) from the city government, regulates structure plan (Flächennutzung) ) fix courts, gardens.
Significant downgrading with the increasing altitude because of the shadow and appeal (Attraktivität) of the building
-frame: Steel
veneer: glass, limestone, granite
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Construction; Transcription
-one veneer ( Fassade) shouldn't be over 37.5 metres
-observation platform at 86 metres
-floor plan (Grundriss) must be younger with the altitude (Höhe)
-til the 86 floor consistent 320 metre block, straight, younger and younger
-Then 16 floors straight tower
-102 floor is the roof in high of 381 metres (transmitters)
-Then 62 metres aerial
-Steelframe (60.000 tonnen) (German!)
-Rivets construction (Nietenkonstruktion)
-Limestone and granite became introduced (wurde eingesetzt) in steel frame
-6.379 glasses
-370.000 Tonnen schwer (German!)
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Opening
1. 31. May 1931
2. Herbert Hoover, President of the United States of America
3.Old governor Al Smith
4.Broadcasted on the radio throughout the country
5.Band on the entrance cut by the grandchild of Al Smith
6.In the evening the whole building was lit up
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Generals
total height: 443.2 metres
without top antenna 381 metres
highest floor is about 373 metres high-has 102 floors and 73 elevators
-building costs $650 million
-architect William Lamb
-rooms are used for business
-most popular attraction in Manhatten
-with the 62 metres aerial the Empire State Building takes the lead of the Chrysler Building in height
-before the World Trade Centre were collapsed they were the highest buildings
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Application
•Used for business
•First 86 floors are used only by the following businesses
insurance companies, leasing companies, publicity agency, offices, banks
73 elevators with a total length (Gesamtlänge) of 11 kilometres
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Extras
•Transceiver (Sender-Empfänger) for local TV- and Radioprogramm and –System (Denglish!)
•anchor locker ( Ankermast, Block) for airships
•Top is served for transmitting mast (Sendemast)
•
---------------------------------------------------
Architects
•Shreve, Lamb and Harmon: architect's office, active in New York -> became popular based on the construction of the Empire State Building . Architects: Richmond Shreve, William F. Lamb und Arthur Loomis Harmon
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William F. Lamb
•Born in November the 21th in 1883, Brooklyn
•Gone in September the 8th in 1952,New York
•Studied on the Williams University, then on the Ecole des Beaux Arts, Paris
•Ground architect`s office with the last named architects Richmond Shreve
•Arthur Loomis Harmon --------------------------------------------------------------------------
Engineers & project manager
•Starrett Brothers and Eken

Der Name des Wolkenkratzers ist von The Empire State abgeleitet, einem Spitznamen des US-Bundesstaates New York.

You can also use the English texts of Wikipedia!

Please use a dictionary if you do not know the proper translation or spelling!
What is build supposed to mean - Bau?
footage = Filmmaterial nicht Gesamtlänge
owns = besitzen im Sinne von Besitztum und nicht als Eigenschaft
...

In English names (Empire State Building) and specific titles (the President of the USA) are capitalised.
It's the same as in German where in addition nouns are written with a capital letter too.

There is no country called America. It's the USA or the US.

Put the German translations in your foot notes, the appendix or speaker notes.


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The meaning of the italic text is unclear as you didn't provide a German version.

My overall impression is that you created this post in less than 5 minutes.
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[chris1997]

Thank you so much!
Yeah, i know its not the best, but i didnt have time to do it really well.
Im in 9th class at Gymnasium and at the moment its very hard, because of many exams.
But you took some of the work away, so thanks alot

[Delfino]

Please take more care next time! We are not here to fix all your typos etc.
This is a language forum, so we expect you to take your time to at least
proofread and fix the line breaks using the 'Ändern' button.

Thank you so much!
Yeah, I know it's not the best, but I didn't have the time to do it really well.
I'm in 9th class at a secondary school, and at the moment it's very hard, because I have to prepare many exams.
But your work helped, and it saved me a huge amount of time; so thanks a lot.

It seems my attempt to motivate you to change your style of posting was not successful.
How do you expect to learn proper English, if you never take the time to practise it?

Please pay more attention to these small details. They are part of the reason why you don't get better marks.